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Writing Academic Task 1 Band 9.0 Example
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Ideas to explore
- Separate absolute increases from percentage changes.
- Calculate loans per member but avoid claims about each individual.
- Keep the description within the information supplied by the task.
Suggested structure
- Introduce the two measures.
- Summarise growth and its different rates.
- Compare the changes.
- Explain the derived ratio carefully.
Useful vocabulary & examples
- percentage points
- the absolute difference between two percentages
A change from 40% to 35% is a fall of five percentage points.
- remain unchanged
- stay at the same value or position
The administration share remained unchanged.
- be replaced by
- be removed and have another feature put in the same place
The car park was replaced by a playground.
Answer analysis
Task Achievement
Integrates both measures and accurately calculates percentage changes and loans per member.
Precision
Distinguishes an aggregate ratio from an assertion about every library member.
Task Prompt
User Essay Analysis
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The figures compare the membership of a library and the number of books borrowed in 2015 and 2025.
Overall, both membership and borrowing increased. However, the growth in membership was considerably greater in proportional terms, so the number of loans per member was lower in the later year.
The library had 2,000 members in 2015, rising to 3,000 a decade later. This increase of 1,000 represented growth of 50%. During the same period, the number of books borrowed climbed from 30,000 to 36,000, a gain of 6,000, or 20%. Membership therefore grew two and a half times as quickly as borrowing when the percentage changes are compared.
Expressed as a ratio, the figures amount to 15 books borrowed per member in 2015 and 12 in 2025. The library served more members and recorded more loans overall, but the average derived from the two totals fell by three books. This calculation does not imply that every member borrowed fewer books, since the charts provide only aggregate figures rather than individual borrowing records.
