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Writing Academic Task 1 Band 9.0 Example
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Ideas to explore
- Group replaced facilities separately from retained features.
- Use compass directions and avoid assumptions about visitor behaviour.
- Keep the description within the information supplied by the task.
Suggested structure
- Introduce the two layouts.
- Summarise replacements and retained features.
- Describe the earlier arrangement.
- Explain the changes by location.
Useful vocabulary & examples
- percentage points
- the absolute difference between two percentages
A change from 40% to 35% is a fall of five percentage points.
- remain unchanged
- stay at the same value or position
The administration share remained unchanged.
- be replaced by
- be removed and have another feature put in the same place
The car park was replaced by a playground.
Answer analysis
Task Achievement
Reports all specified changes and stable features with accurate spatial references.
Organisation
Separates the initial layout from later replacements, while the overview summarises both change and continuity.
Task Prompt
User Essay Analysis
Review the public answer with report-style highlights.
The maps compare the layout of Riverside Park in 2010 and 2025, showing changes to its facilities while retaining several original features.
Overall, the park gained a playground, a cafe and a footpath. These changes replaced the car park and tennis courts, whereas the entrance, central lawn and northern pond remained in their original positions.
In 2010, visitors entered from the south, with the lawn occupying the centre of the park. A car park lay to the west of the lawn, while tennis courts were situated on the eastern side. The pond was located in the north. The layout therefore placed the principal facilities on either side of the central open space.
By 2025, the western car park had been removed and a playground established in its place. On the opposite side, a cafe had replaced the tennis courts. A footpath was also added around the lawn, although the lawn itself was retained. The southern entrance and northern pond were unchanged. The maps indicate alterations to the site’s facilities, but do not specify how visitors’ numbers or activities changed over the period.
