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Writing Academic Task 2 Band 6.0 Example

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Task 2

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Ideas to explore

  • Population loss can affect rural shops, schools and informal support.
  • City opportunities depend on housing, transport and service capacity.
  • Respect for individual choice can coexist with balanced regional investment.

Suggested structure

  1. Give an overall positive or negative judgement with any necessary condition.
  2. Explain the effect on the communities people leave.
  3. Explain urban opportunities and capacity pressures.
  4. Weigh the effects and conclude consistently.
Useful vocabulary & examples
rural depopulation
a decline in the number of people living in countryside areas

Rural depopulation can make local services harder to maintain.

urban capacity
a city’s ability to accommodate residents through housing and services

Planning should increase urban capacity as demand grows.

balanced regional development
improvement that considers the needs of different areas

Balanced regional development can preserve meaningful choices.

Task Prompt

In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

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Band 6.0

In many parts of the world people from rural areas tend to travel to urban areas which is the cause of shrinking population in the countryside. In my opinion, it is a positive development which leads people to have many more opportunities in job and education fields. This essay will discuss both views and explain why I consider the opportunities more important, provided that rural needs and urban capacity are not ignored.

The clearest advantage is access to a wider range of opportunities. A city can bring together employers, educational institutions and specialised services that are difficult to provide in a small settlement. A young person seeking a particular qualification or profession may therefore have a better chance of pursuing it after moving. This benefit is important because place of birth should not determine the limits of someone's education or career.

Concentrating people can also make some services easier to organise. Public transport and shared facilities may serve many residents within a relatively small area. However, these gains depend on planning; they should not be assumed to occur simply because a population becomes larger. Suitable housing and reliable connections are necessary if newcomers are to benefit from urban opportunities.

Rural communities can experience real disadvantages. Shops may lose customers and a school may struggle when fewer families remain. Older residents may also have less informal support. These effects call for appropriate local services and investment, but they do not justify requiring individuals to stay where their own options are limited. Communities can adapt through better connections and different forms of economic activity.

On balance, I see this development as positive when it expands people's choices and the receiving cities are prepared for growth. The judgement is not that every city is better than every village. It is that voluntary movement towards suitable opportunities can improve lives, provided that the needs of both areas are considered.

In conclusion, migration can widen access to work, education and services. Its benefits are strongest when urban planning and continued rural support prevent those opportunities from producing avoidable pressure or neglect.

Targeted Improvement Tips

1
Give an overall evaluation rather than only stating that the trend has two sides.
2
Explain one rural and one urban consequence, distinguishing community effects from individual opportunities.
3
Revise the quoted phrases and qualify unsupported historical, statistical or universal claims.

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