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Writing Academic Task 2 Band 6.0 Example

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  • The main advantage is that the message gives children a reason to practise.
  • The message can also help children respond constructively to setbacks.
  • The disadvantage is the word anything.

Suggested structure

  1. Give a direct introduction and state the required position.
  2. Explain the first side or reason with a relevant example.
  3. Address the second side and the conditions that limit the claim.
  4. Return to the precise question in the conclusion.
Useful vocabulary & examples
persistence
continuing despite difficulty

This teaches persistence alongside judgement.

an unrealistic promise
an assurance that ignores real limits

Telling children that effort can achieve anything can motivate them, but the promise is too absolute. The advantages concern persistence, while the disadvantages arise when children mistake effort for a guarantee.

constructive feedback
guidance that identifies how to improve

Telling children that effort can achieve anything can motivate them, but the promise is too absolute. The advantages concern persistence, while the disadvantages arise when children mistake effort for a guarantee.

Task Prompt

In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. what are the advantage and disadvantage of giving children this message.

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Band 6.0

Some civilizations believe and speak to their children about if they try hard enough they can achieve anything. This opinion has some advantages like, children can be more hardworking and they will be more persuasive in life. However like every argument there are two sides and related to this topic there are some disadvantages too. The promise becomes problematic when it is interpreted literally.

The main advantage is that the message gives children a reason to practise. A pupil who struggles with a mathematics problem may continue after an unsuccessful attempt if they believe improvement is possible. Effort is something the child can influence, unlike an immediate comparison with the most talented person in the class. This can make a difficult activity feel manageable rather than permanently beyond reach.

The message can also help children respond constructively to setbacks. Instead of assuming that one poor result defines their ability, they may try another strategy or ask for feedback. Adults can strengthen this benefit by noticing a useful process, such as regular practice or careful revision. Praise that identifies what helped is more informative than simply telling a child they will become the best.

The disadvantage is the word anything. Opportunities depend on resources, other people's decisions and circumstances as well as determination. If a child is told that effort always produces success, an unsuccessful outcome may seem to prove personal laziness. They may continue pursuing an unsuitable goal rather than adjust it, or neglect rest because they believe every spare moment must be used to try harder.

A more realistic message preserves encouragement without promising control over every result. Adults can explain that effort improves the chance of progress and that changing a plan is sometimes sensible. A child who does not win a competition can still recognise skills gained and choose what to practise next. This teaches persistence alongside judgement.

In conclusion, encouragement can develop confidence and productive habits, but an unlimited promise creates pressure and misplaced blame. Children benefit more from being told that effort matters than from being assured that effort makes every ambition achievable.

Targeted Improvement Tips

1
Use the direct opening to answer the precise task and keep that judgement consistent.
2
Develop a relevant example through cause and consequence rather than leaving it as a name or list item.
3
Check the quoted clauses in context and qualify statements that imply a guaranteed outcome.

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