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Writing Academic Task 1 Band 6.0 Example

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Task 1

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Summarise the overall pattern: the village grew substantially between 1868 and 1994.
Compare the stages of expansion: early development was limited, followed by growth around the centre and later in several outlying areas.
Mention transport changes accurately: the railway was built in 1909 and the motorway in 1970; the park and golf course remained a prominent mapped feature.

Suggested structure

Introduce the map, location and time span.
Give an overview of the main expansion and transport-related changes.
Describe the earliest period and development up to 1922.
Compare the 1922–1970 and 1970–1994 periods, including the directions of later growth.
Finish with a brief summary of the village’s expansion and continuing park and golf course.

Useful vocabulary & examples

built-up area: Land covered by buildings and developed settlement.
The built-up area was limited in the earliest period.
spread around the centre: Expanded outward in places close to the central area.
Development spread around the centre between 1883 and 1922.
in several separate areas: In a number of distinct locations rather than one continuous zone.
From 1970 to 1994, development appeared in several separate areas.
transport links: Routes or services that connect places, such as railways and motorways.
The map shows the railway and motorway as important transport links.

Task Prompt

Chorleywood is a village near London whose population has increased steadily since the middle of the nineteenth century. The map below shows the development of the village.

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Band 6.0

There was a village located in the London’s suburb with stable population growth from 1868 to 1994, namely Chorleywood. The map delineates the evolving of this neighbourhood over the observed periods. Chorleywood had three types of roads: main roads, motorway, and railway. The village was divided into nine parts by these roads. The motorway and railway were added later, in 1970 and 1909 respectively. The railway runs from west to east through the village, with Chorleywood Station close to the centre, while the motorway crosses the eastern side from north to south. A major roundabout connects the motorway with a main road.

Initially, development was limited to a small central area close to the main roads. Between 1883 and 1922, the built-up area expanded around the station, particularly towards the south and west. Further growth took place from 1922 to 1970, with larger sections appearing on both sides of the railway, mainly to the west and south-east of the centre.

The most extensive expansion occurred between 1970 and 1994. New areas were established in several locations, including north of the park and golf course, east of the motorway, and south-east of the railway. Overall, Chorleywood grew from a compact settlement around its central transport routes into a more widely spread village, while the park and golf course remained in the central northern area.

Targeted Improvement Tips

Replace the opening reference to population growth with a direct map overview describing Chorleywood’s expansion from a central settlement to a more spread-out village.

Describe development by map period and state its location relative to the station, railway, motorway, and park; avoid unsupported counts such as “nine parts.”

Proofread each noun phrase for articles and natural forms, especially before singular countable nouns and when choosing between a noun such as “development” and a verb form such as “evolving.”

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Overall Band

6.0

Competent

Words

223

Type

Map

Criteria Breakdown

Task Achievement

6.0 Band

The response covers the map’s main periods and identifies important changes, including the railway and motorway dates and the later spread of development. Its concluding contrast, “from a compact settlement around its central transport routes into a more widely spread village,” gives a useful overview. However, “divided into nine parts” is not a clear map-supported feature, and the early growth pattern could be described more precisely. Next, prioritise the overall expansion and the locations of development in each period.

Coherence & Cohesion

6.0 Band

The answer is arranged in a generally effective sequence: infrastructure, earlier development, later growth, and an overall summary. The transitions “Initially,” “Between 1883 and 1922,” and “The most extensive expansion” help readers follow the chronology. However, the opening shifts from population growth to map description, and the claim that the village was split into nine parts interrupts the account of development. Next, place a clear overview after the introduction, then group details by time period.

Lexical Resource

5.5 Band

There is useful task vocabulary in phrases such as “built-up area,” “expanded,” and “compact settlement,” and the answer distinguishes transport features from development. Some choices are unnatural or imprecise: “the London’s suburb” and “the evolving of this neighbourhood” do not express the ideas idiomatically, while “three types of roads” groups a railway with roads. Next, learn accurate map-report collocations such as “a suburb of London,” “development over time,” and “transport routes.”

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

5.5 Band

The continuation uses several controlled complex sentences, including the contrast beginning “while the motorway crosses the eastern side.” Most later sentences are complete and easy to understand. The preserved opening, however, contains errors in “the London’s suburb” and “the evolving of this neighbourhood,” and the list “main roads, motorway, and railway” lacks consistent articles. Next, revise noun phrases and article use, then proofread the introduction separately from the chronological description.

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