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193 words AcademicTask 1Line Graph

Task 1

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Petroleum was the leading fuel throughout, reaching about 140 in the mid-1980s, dipping around 1990–91, then recovering to a similar level.
Coal had a sharp early fall, a partial rebound, and then a longer decline to about 35 by 2000.
Natural gas stayed near 40 for much of the 1980s, rose strongly after 1991, and ended at about 100, above coal but below petroleum.

Suggested structure

Introduce the graph by naming the three fuels, the UK, the years and the unit.
Give an overview of the overall ranking and the contrasting directions of change.
Describe petroleum’s rise, dip and recovery with key dates and approximate figures.
Compare coal’s decline with natural gas’s later growth, including their end values.

Useful vocabulary & examples

remain the leading source: continue to have the highest production level among the categories.
Petroleum remained the leading source throughout the period.
fall sharply: decrease quickly and substantially over a relatively short interval.
Coal production fell sharply to around 40 in 1984.
recover to approximately: rise again after a decline to reach a similar or specified level.
Petroleum recovered to approximately 140 in 1996.
overtake: become greater than another category after previously being lower.
Natural gas overtook coal in the early 1990s.

Task Prompt

The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

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Band 4.0

the line graph shows the generating steps of the energy resource in last 19 years from 1981 until 2000 in British. Overall, the petrol was the highest product, while natural gas and coal were the lowest expenditure in the using of energy fossil fuel. In the 1981, natural gas manufacture started from 40 units, afterwards it stayed around 40 units until 1988. After that, it increased slowly and reached about 50 units in 1991. Then the number went up quickly, and it was around 75 in 1994. At the end it reached 100 units.

Petroleum started at about 80 units and it rise to 140 in 1985. After some changes it fell to nearly 100 in 1990, but increased again and finished at about 145 units, this was highest.

Coal started also near 80 units, but it fell quickly to about 40 in 1984. It went up to around 63 in 1986 and after it mostly went down. In 1991 it was about 45 units, and then it decreased to around 36 units at 2000. In conclusion, petroleum had the biggest production, and gas was growing but coal was falling in the end.

Targeted Improvement Tips

Replace the overview’s claim that gas and coal were both lowest with a clear end-point comparison: gas rose substantially, while coal declined.

Use the chart’s category name “Petroleum” throughout and describe the vertical values as production levels, not expenditure or manufacture.

After drafting, check past-tense verbs and sentence boundaries; for example, change “it rise” to “it rose” and separate the two ideas joined by “145 units, this was highest.”

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Overall Band

4.0

Modest

Words

193

Type

Line Graph

Criteria Breakdown

Task Achievement

5.0 Band

The answer includes the main overall contrast and reports trends for all three fuels, including petroleum rising to about 145 units and coal ending near 36. However, the overview says “natural gas and coal were the lowest,” which is misleading because gas climbs to about 100 by 2000. Make the overview compare the fuels at the beginning and end, and prioritise the major rises and falls.

Coherence & Cohesion

5.0 Band

The account moves broadly from natural gas to petroleum and coal, and time markers such as “until 1988” and “In 1991” help readers follow the data. The overview and conclusion do not fully align, and “After some changes” is vague. Organise the body into clearer comparisons, and use transitions that show whether a figure is rising, falling, or remaining stable.

Lexical Resource

4.0 Band

The answer uses some useful trend language, including “increased slowly,” “went up quickly,” and “fell quickly.” But phrases such as “generating steps,” “lowest expenditure,” and “natural gas manufacture” do not accurately describe a fuel-production graph; “petrol” also differs from the graph’s label, “Petroleum.” Learn a small set of precise terms—production, level, rise, fall—and use them consistently.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

4.0 Band

Simple sentences communicate several comparisons, but there are recurring errors in articles, verb forms, and sentence boundaries. Examples include “In the 1981” and “it rise to 140”; the comma in “145 units, this was highest” also joins two complete ideas incorrectly. Practise past-tense reporting and sentence punctuation, then proofread each sentence for subject–verb agreement and articles.

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