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Writing Academic Task 1 Band 7.0 Example

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203 words AcademicTask 1Map

Task 1

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Ideas to explore

Separate features that remain from those that have been added, relocated or replaced; the business units and car park remain, while the IT centre gives way to an innovation centre.
Describe the shift in land use: open grassland in the northwest is now substantially developed, while trees remain in the southwest.
Treat transport access as a key change, noting the cycle path, station and bus stop, while also mentioning the railway that continues to border the site.

Suggested structure

Introduce the maps and identify the time comparison.
Give an overview of the most important changes: redevelopment and improved access.
Describe the 2008 arrangement by area, covering open land and existing facilities.
Compare the current layout, highlighting retained and replaced buildings.
Finish with access changes and any transport feature that remains.

Useful vocabulary & examples

give way to: to be replaced by something new
The IT centre has given way to an innovation centre.
remain in broadly similar positions: to stay in approximately the same locations
The business units remain in broadly similar positions.
be concentrated in: to be located mainly within a particular area
Woodland was concentrated in the southwest.
border the site: to run along the edge of an area
The railway continues to border the site to the east.

Task Prompt

The maps below show a science park in 2008 and the same park today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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Band 7.0

Two maps illustrate the transformations that a particular place experienced between 2008 and today. In general, the area has experienced minimal development regarding its layout. In addition, it has become more convenient compared to how it looked in the year 2008. The first change in Science Park is that the grassland has been taken away, with a research and development building and a university hub now occupying the northern part of the site. The offices remain in the north-east, although the reception area shown beside them in 2008 is no longer labelled. The business units and central car park have stayed in broadly the same positions, while the road continues to run around the eastern edge. In the south-west, the former IT centre has been replaced by an innovation centre, and woodland remains in this part of the park. The cyber security facility is still in the south-east. A cycle path has also been added across the middle of the park, connecting the business-unit area with the eastern route, and a bus stop is now shown beside the road on the eastern boundary. Finally, although a railway already ran along the southern edge in 2008, a station has been built next to it.

Targeted Improvement Tips

Revise the overview so it acknowledges both the broadly similar layout and the major changes in facilities and transport.

Replace general judgements such as “more convenient” with the specific mapped additions, including the cycle path, bus stop, and station.

Check each area against the maps before describing it, then group details by location to avoid omissions or unclear comparisons.

AI Feedback

Overall Band

7.0

Good

Words

203

Type

Map

Criteria Breakdown

Task Achievement

6.5 Band

The response covers the key replacements and additions, including “the former IT centre has been replaced by an innovation centre” and the new station beside the existing railway. However, “minimal development” understates the number of changes, and “more convenient” is a broad conclusion rather than a clearly demonstrated map feature. Next, lead with the contrast between the largely retained layout and the substantial changes in facilities and transport.

Coherence & Cohesion

7.0 Band

The answer moves from an overview to changes in the north, then the central and southern areas, which gives the reader a workable route through the maps. Phrases such as “In the south-west” and “Finally” help signal location and sequence. The opening repeats the general idea of change before explaining it, though. Group the overview into one concise statement, then organise the details consistently by area.

Lexical Resource

6.5 Band

There is useful map vocabulary in “grassland,” “cycle path,” “railway,” and “eastern boundary,” as well as clear replacement language. Some phrasing is less precise: “more convenient compared to how it looked” does not identify which new features improve access, while “taken away” is less formal than “replaced.” Name the relevant additions directly and use precise verbs such as “replaced,” “added,” and “remains.”

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

7.0 Band

The response uses a range of sentence structures, including the contrast in “although the reception area … is no longer labelled” and the relative clause describing the railway. Most sentences are easy to follow. The main weakness is phrasing rather than a serious sentence-level error: “The first change in Science Park is that” is wordy, and the long sentence beginning “A cycle path has also been added” carries several details. Use a concise topic sentence and split dense information when needed.

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