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Writing Academic Task 1 Band 4.0 Example

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205 words AcademicTask 1Map

Task 1

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Ideas to explore

Separate features that remain from those that have been added, relocated or replaced; the business units and car park remain, while the IT centre gives way to an innovation centre.
Describe the shift in land use: open grassland in the northwest is now substantially developed, while trees remain in the southwest.
Treat transport access as a key change, noting the cycle path, station and bus stop, while also mentioning the railway that continues to border the site.

Suggested structure

Introduce the maps and identify the time comparison.
Give an overview of the most important changes: redevelopment and improved access.
Describe the 2008 arrangement by area, covering open land and existing facilities.
Compare the current layout, highlighting retained and replaced buildings.
Finish with access changes and any transport feature that remains.

Useful vocabulary & examples

give way to: to be replaced by something new
The IT centre has given way to an innovation centre.
remain in broadly similar positions: to stay in approximately the same locations
The business units remain in broadly similar positions.
be concentrated in: to be located mainly within a particular area
Woodland was concentrated in the southwest.
border the site: to run along the edge of an area
The railway continues to border the site to the east.

Task Prompt

The maps below show a science park in 2008 and the same park today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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Band 4.0

The maps illustrates how a science park transformed over the years ,from 2008 to the present day. Overall , considerable changes underwent in the park over the period , replacing new amenities and facilities such as educational centres where added alongside the existing features . Moreover , the layout of the car park display some notable changes: a station has been added at the southern edge, and the former IT centre has been replaced by an Innovation centre. In 2008, the north-west was mainly grassland, while offices and a reception building stood in the north-east. Today, research and development occupies the north-west, a university hub has been added near the middle of the northern side, and the offices remain in the north-east. The business units are still on the western side, and the Cyber security facility remains in the south-east. The central car park is present in both maps. Woodland remains in several parts of the park, while a bus stop is now marked beside the eastern road. The main road continues to curve around the eastern boundary, and paths connect the car park with nearby buildings. These changes show that the site has become more focused on research, education and transport, while retaining some of its original facilities.

Targeted Improvement Tips

Write a one-sentence overview that names the largest change and the main features that remained, rather than using the vague phrase “considerable changes.”

Group the details by map location: describe the northern facilities together, then the car park, southern facilities and transport additions.

After drafting, underline each subject and verb in the opening and check agreement, then proofread commas and commonly confused words such as “where” and “were.”

AI Feedback

Overall Band

4.0

Modest

Words

205

Type

Map

Criteria Breakdown

Task Achievement

5.0 Band

The overview identifies substantial change, and the completed answer compares several clear features: the former IT centre becomes an Innovation centre, a station is added, and the business units remain on the west. However, “replacing new amenities and facilities” does not clearly describe what changed, and some listed details are not prioritised. Next, state the biggest changes plainly in the overview, then select the most important additions, replacements and retained features.

Coherence & Cohesion

5.0 Band

The answer has an overall statement followed by descriptions of the northern and southern areas, so the reader can follow the general comparison. However, the opening runs several ideas together, and “Moreover” introduces details without a clear relationship to the previous sentence. The map information could be grouped more deliberately by location or by change type. Use a concise overview, then separate paragraphs for the northern area and the central/southern area.

Lexical Resource

4.5 Band

There is relevant map vocabulary, including “grassland,” “university hub” and “station,” and the answer attempts to describe replacement and retention. Some word choices are inaccurate or awkward: “replacing new amenities” obscures whether facilities were added or removed, while “changes underwent” is not a natural collocation. Next, practise precise map verbs such as “was replaced by,” “was added” and “remained,” and check collocations before using them.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

4.0 Band

The completed answer uses some longer structures, including “while offices and a reception building stood in the north-east,” but frequent agreement and word-form errors reduce clarity. In the exact opening, “The maps illustrates” should use a plural verb, “where added” confuses two forms, and “the layout … display” has a subject–verb agreement error. Next, proofread each sentence for its subject and verb, then check articles, punctuation and clause boundaries.

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