User-written IELTS example

Writing Academic Task 1 Band 4.0 Example

Original task prompt, user essay, band score, and related examples in the same report workspace.

206 words AcademicTask 1Map

Task 1

Illustrative target band for this original model answer.

Plan your answer

Try your own response before reading the samples.

Ideas to explore

Separate features that remain from those that have been added, relocated or replaced; the business units and car park remain, while the IT centre gives way to an innovation centre.
Describe the shift in land use: open grassland in the northwest is now substantially developed, while trees remain in the southwest.
Treat transport access as a key change, noting the cycle path, station and bus stop, while also mentioning the railway that continues to border the site.

Suggested structure

Introduce the maps and identify the time comparison.
Give an overview of the most important changes: redevelopment and improved access.
Describe the 2008 arrangement by area, covering open land and existing facilities.
Compare the current layout, highlighting retained and replaced buildings.
Finish with access changes and any transport feature that remains.

Useful vocabulary & examples

give way to: to be replaced by something new
The IT centre has given way to an innovation centre.
remain in broadly similar positions: to stay in approximately the same locations
The business units remain in broadly similar positions.
be concentrated in: to be located mainly within a particular area
Woodland was concentrated in the southwest.
border the site: to run along the edge of an area
The railway continues to border the site to the east.

Task Prompt

The maps below show a science park in 2008 and the same park today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

User Essay Analysis

Review the public answer with report-style highlights.

Band 4.0

Given two maps shows as the science park map in 2008 and nowadays. In general, overall view of park changed. New building were added and some of them dislocated to different parts of park. First of all, Research and development building was built on the west north angle of the park in the place of grassland. The offices is still in the north-east area, but reception is no longer shown and a University hub have been added below it. Business units remain on the west side, and the car park is still in the middle of park. In the south-west, the old IT centre changed into an Innovation centre, with woodland still nearby. Cyber security stay in the south-east, and the railway continue around the outside of the eastern and southern edges. Also, a cycle path has been added across the park, connecting the west side with the offices area and going beside the car park. A bus stop can be seen on the east side near the road. Finally, a station is now located on the southern boundary, close to the Innovation centre. Overall, the park has more research and transport facilities today, while the main business units and car park keep their original places.

Targeted Improvement Tips

Plan a two-part overview before writing: note the new research, education and transport facilities, then identify the business units and car park as features that remain.

Use a small set of precise location phrases—such as “in the north-western corner,” “on the eastern side” and “along the southern boundary”—and check each against the map.

After drafting, check every sentence for subject–verb agreement and articles; specifically review forms such as “the offices are” and “a hub has been added.”

AI Feedback

Overall Band

4.0

Modest

Words

206

Type

Map

Criteria Breakdown

Task Achievement

5.0 Band

The answer gives a broad overview—“New building were added”—and covers several key changes, including the research building, University hub, Innovation centre and station. The described locations mostly match the maps. However, the contrast between new and unchanged features is not developed clearly, and the cycle path and transport changes could be integrated into a more precise summary. Next, group the main additions together and explicitly identify which facilities stayed in place.

Coherence & Cohesion

4.5 Band

The answer moves from an overview into locations, using sequence markers such as “First of all” and “Finally,” so the reader can follow its general route through the park. However, it lists features one by one, and the repeated “Overall” framing does not help organise the details into clear comparisons. Next, use one paragraph for the main changes and another for features that remain, with direct links such as “while” and “whereas.”

Lexical Resource

4.0 Band

The response uses relevant map vocabulary, including “grassland,” “cycle path,” “bus stop” and “southern boundary,” and names several facilities accurately. Some wording is imprecise or unnatural, however: “west north angle” is not a natural way to describe a location, and “dislocated” is not suitable for buildings being moved or replaced. Next, learn standard compass-location phrases such as “north-western corner” and use verbs like “remained,” “was replaced” and “was added.”

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

3.5 Band

There are some attempts at longer sentences, for example “The offices is still in the north-east area, but reception is no longer shown…”. However, subject–verb agreement, articles and sentence structure are often inaccurate: “The offices is” and “a University hub have” are examples. These errors make the description less clear. Next, check each sentence for its subject and verb, then proofread singular/plural nouns and articles before submitting.

Topic Band Distribution

Band 9.03 examples

Band 8.03 examples

Band 7.03 examples

Band 6.03 examples

Band 5.03 examples

Band 4.03 examples

Practice this prompt

Use the same topic in Hack Admission AI and compare your answer with this example.

Check your answer on this topic Browse all examples