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Writing Academic Task 1 Band 6.0 Example

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Task 1

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Ideas to explore

Separate features that remain from those that have been added, relocated or replaced; the business units and car park remain, while the IT centre gives way to an innovation centre.
Describe the shift in land use: open grassland in the northwest is now substantially developed, while trees remain in the southwest.
Treat transport access as a key change, noting the cycle path, station and bus stop, while also mentioning the railway that continues to border the site.

Suggested structure

Introduce the maps and identify the time comparison.
Give an overview of the most important changes: redevelopment and improved access.
Describe the 2008 arrangement by area, covering open land and existing facilities.
Compare the current layout, highlighting retained and replaced buildings.
Finish with access changes and any transport feature that remains.

Useful vocabulary & examples

give way to: to be replaced by something new
The IT centre has given way to an innovation centre.
remain in broadly similar positions: to stay in approximately the same locations
The business units remain in broadly similar positions.
be concentrated in: to be located mainly within a particular area
Woodland was concentrated in the southwest.
border the site: to run along the edge of an area
The railway continues to border the site to the east.

Task Prompt

The maps below show a science park in 2008 and the same park today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

User Essay Analysis

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Band 6.0

The provided maps depict the condition the science park in 2008 and now, illsutrating an impressive development of the infrastructure during that time period. Overall, there are some main changes that have altered the science park, which are the establishment of research and development, the extension of cyber security, and the improvement of public transportation. In 2008, the north-western area was largely grassland, while offices and a reception building occupied the north-east. Business units stood to the west of a central car park, and an IT centre was located in the south-west. Cyber security facilities were positioned in the south-east. A railway ran along the southern boundary, and a road followed the eastern edge.

Today, the site has a wider range of facilities. The grassland in the north-west has been replaced by a research and development centre, and a university hub has been added between it and the offices. The business units and car park remain in broadly similar positions, although the former IT centre has become an innovation centre. Cyber security is still in the south-east. In addition, a station has been built beside the railway, while a bus stop is now shown along the eastern road. A cycle path is also marked around the central and eastern part of the site. Thus, the park has shifted from open land and basic work facilities towards research, innovation and improved transport links.

Targeted Improvement Tips

Revise the overview to name the clearest transformations: grassland replaced by research and development, the IT centre becoming an innovation centre, and new transport facilities.

Avoid claiming that cyber security expanded unless a clear difference in its mapped size or footprint supports that comparison.

Proofread the opening for spelling and sentence structure; a concise “The maps show…” sentence is a reliable starting point.

AI Feedback

Overall Band

6.0

Competent

Words

232

Type

Map

Criteria Breakdown

Task Achievement

6.0 Band

The completed answer identifies several important changes, including that “the former IT centre has become an innovation centre” and that “a station has been built beside the railway.” It also gives an overview and compares locations across the two maps. However, “the extension of cyber security” is not clearly supported by the visual, and the overview could mention the new university hub and replacement of grassland. Next, check each claimed change against the maps and prioritise the most certain ones.

Coherence & Cohesion

6.5 Band

The response follows a useful order: an introduction and overview, a description of the 2008 layout, then a comparison with the present. Transitions such as “Today” and “In addition” help readers follow the changes. The final sentence restates the broad direction of development, but some information is listed rather than directly compared, and the opening overview is difficult to parse. Next, group changes by location or explicitly contrast each old feature with its replacement.

Lexical Resource

6.0 Band

There is relevant map vocabulary in phrases such as “southern boundary,” “north-western area” and “has been replaced by,” alongside accurate facility names. Some wording is imprecise or unnecessarily broad: “public transportation” is less specific than naming the station and bus stop, while “impressive development” adds an unsupported judgement. The spelling “illsutrating” is also incorrect. Next, use neutral map-reporting language and proofread key task vocabulary.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

5.5 Band

Most of the body uses understandable past and present forms, including “was located” and “has been added,” and the later sentences generally communicate the map details clearly. The opening contains a structural problem in “depict the condition the science park,” and “there are some main changes … which are” is awkwardly constructed. The spelling error in “illsutrating” also affects accuracy. Next, practise concise openings using “The maps show…” and check sentence structure before submission.

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