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Writing Academic Task 1 Band 6.0 Example

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Task 1

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Separate features that remain from those that have been added, relocated or replaced; the business units and car park remain, while the IT centre gives way to an innovation centre.
Describe the shift in land use: open grassland in the northwest is now substantially developed, while trees remain in the southwest.
Treat transport access as a key change, noting the cycle path, station and bus stop, while also mentioning the railway that continues to border the site.

Suggested structure

Introduce the maps and identify the time comparison.
Give an overview of the most important changes: redevelopment and improved access.
Describe the 2008 arrangement by area, covering open land and existing facilities.
Compare the current layout, highlighting retained and replaced buildings.
Finish with access changes and any transport feature that remains.

Useful vocabulary & examples

give way to: to be replaced by something new
The IT centre has given way to an innovation centre.
remain in broadly similar positions: to stay in approximately the same locations
The business units remain in broadly similar positions.
be concentrated in: to be located mainly within a particular area
Woodland was concentrated in the southwest.
border the site: to run along the edge of an area
The railway continues to border the site to the east.

Task Prompt

The maps below show a science park in 2008 and the same park today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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Band 6.0

The provided map illustrates the differences between the park in 2008 and its current state. From an overall perspective, it is clear that the park has undergone significant changes, with the most noticeable being the addition of new buildings, which were erected after 2008. Several buildings have been constructed in previously vacant areas within the park.

In 2008, the business units were in the west-central part of the site, while offices and a reception area stood to the north. A car park occupied the centre, with an IT centre to its southwest and cyber security to the southeast. Much of the north-western area was grassland, and woodland was visible in the south-west. A railway ran along the eastern edge.

Today, the business units and central car park remain. The northern area has been redeveloped: research and development facilities, a university hub and offices are now shown, while the reception is no longer marked. The IT centre has been replaced by an innovation centre, whereas cyber security remains in the southeast. A station has been added along the southern edge, and a bus stop is shown on the east. A cycle path also runs through the northern and eastern parts of the park. Overall, the site has become more developed while retaining some of its original layout.

Targeted Improvement Tips

Make the overview name the main land-use shift: northern grassland has largely given way to new facilities, alongside the replacement of the IT centre.

Organise the body by comparing the northern facilities first, then the southern facilities, and finish with the new transport features.

Use exact map labels such as “university hub,” “innovation centre,” “station” and “bus stop” instead of relying on broad phrases like “new buildings.”

AI Feedback

Overall Band

6.0

Competent

Words

216

Type

Map

Criteria Breakdown

Task Achievement

6.0 Band

The overview identifies the main change as “the addition of new buildings,” and the body covers the key retained and changed facilities, including the business units, car park and replacement of the IT centre. The comparison is broadly accurate. To make the summary more complete, explicitly highlight the new transport features and the change from northern grassland to developed facilities, rather than leaving these details to the final paragraph.

Coherence & Cohesion

6.5 Band

The response moves from an overview to the 2008 layout and then the present-day map, making the comparison easy to follow. Phrases such as “In 2008” and “Today” clearly signal the time shift. The final sentence usefully sums up the transformation. One refinement would be to group the new buildings and transport additions more distinctly, so the reader can compare development and access without switching between facility types.

Lexical Resource

6.0 Band

Map-related vocabulary is generally precise: “grassland,” “woodland,” “railway,” and “cycle path” name visible features, while “replaced by” effectively describes the IT centre’s change. “Undergone significant changes” is clear but broad, and “new buildings” is repeated in the overview and body. For a more exact account, use a few labels such as “research and development facilities” and “university hub” in the overview, and vary general terms like “changes” with “redevelopment.”

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

6.5 Band

The answer uses a good mix of structures, including the relative clause in “new buildings, which were erected after 2008” and the contrast in “whereas cyber security remains.” The sentences are generally controlled and readable. The opening is somewhat wordy, but it is not grammatically incorrect. As a refinement, use a more concise overview construction and continue checking that longer sentences keep their comparisons easy to follow.

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