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Writing Academic Task 1 Band 4.0 Example

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186 words AcademicTask 1Pie Chart

Task 1

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Renewables rose from 15.0% in 2014 to 26.2% in 2018, the most notable increase.
Coal fell from 28.4% to 18.1%, while nuclear declined slightly from 22.5% to 21.6%.
Gas remained the largest category at 30.1% in both years; Oil and Other stayed at 4.0%.

Suggested structure

Introduce the two pie charts, the UK, the years and the percentage measure.
Give an overview highlighting the main increase, the main decrease and stable categories.
Compare the 2014 shares, grouping the larger sources before the smaller ones.
Describe the 2018 figures and directly compare them with 2014.

Useful vocabulary & examples

accounted for: made up a particular proportion of the total
Gas accounted for 30.1% of energy generation in both years.
remained unchanged: stayed at the same level
The share for Oil and Other remained unchanged at 4.0%.
recorded the largest increase: showed the biggest rise in the figures
Renewables recorded the largest increase between 2014 and 2018.
fell by 10.3 percentage points: decreased by the difference between two percentage values
Coal fell by 10.3 percentage points, from 28.4% to 18.1%.

Task Prompt

The pie chart below shows the energy generation by fuel type in the UK over two years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

User Essay Analysis

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Band 4.0

The pie chart provides key information about power generation from different types in the United kingdom during two years. The units are measuerd in years. Overall, it is clear from the graph that Renewables had increased. In addition, Oil and Gas stayed the same throghout the period. Wereas Nuclear and coal decreased. According to what the figures show, the share of Renewables went from 15.0% in 2014 to 26.2% in 2018, which was the biggest change. In 2014, Gas was the largest source, at 30.1%, and it remained at the same level in 2018. Coal was also important in 2014, with 28.4%, but its figure fell to 18.1% four years later. Nuclear power accounted for 22.5% in 2014 and then went down slightly to 21.6% in 2018. Oil and Other was the smallest category in both years, and it stayed at 4.0%. Therefore, the chart shows that renewable energy became more important, while coal had a large fall. Gas did not change, and Nuclear and Oil and Other showed only a small or no change between the years.

Targeted Improvement Tips

Replace the statement about units with “The figures are given as percentages,” and name 2014 and 2018 in the introduction.

Write an overview that identifies the largest increase, the largest decrease and the unchanged category before giving individual figures.

After drafting, check every percentage against the chart and proofread spellings such as “measured,” “throughout” and “whereas.”

AI Feedback

Overall Band

4.0

Modest

Words

186

Type

Pie Chart

Criteria Breakdown

Task Achievement

5.0 Band

The completed answer reports the main movements accurately, including renewables rising from 15.0% to 26.2% and gas remaining at 30.1%. It also covers coal, nuclear and Oil and Other. However, “The units are measuerd in years” misidentifies what the figures represent, and the overview’s “Nuclear and coal decreased” groups a slight fall with a much larger one. Next, state that the values are percentages and distinguish the biggest change.

Coherence & Cohesion

4.5 Band

The answer moves from an overview to individual comparisons, and phrases such as “four years later” help connect the two dates. However, “Wereas Nuclear and coal decreased” is a fragment, and “According to what the figures show” is an awkward transition into the details. Organise the response into a clear overview followed by grouped comparisons, and use complete sentences with straightforward links such as “By contrast” where useful.

Lexical Resource

4.5 Band

The response uses relevant chart vocabulary, including “share,” “accounted for” and “category,” and “the biggest change” identifies an important feature. Some expressions are imprecise or informal: “from different types” does not specify fuel types, and “had a large fall” is less natural than “fell considerably.” Correct “throghout” as well. Next, practise a small set of accurate terms for proportions and changes, then use them consistently.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

4.0 Band

Some simple comparisons are formed correctly, for example, “it remained at the same level in 2018.” However, the answer includes misspellings and sentence-level problems: “Wereas Nuclear and coal decreased” lacks a complete clause, while “had increased” is an awkward tense choice for a past chart comparison. Use simple past for changes between 2014 and 2018, check sentence boundaries, and proofread spelling and capitalization before submitting.

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