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Writing Academic Task 1 Band 5.0 Example

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188 words AcademicTask 1Map

Task 1

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Identify what stayed constant: the stage, auditorium, fourteen chairs and central main entrance.
Track the storage room’s relocation from the left side in 2010 to the right side in 2012.
Compare the supporting rooms: the 2010 media room and café give way to a different arrangement including a hall, showers and restaurants in 2012.

Suggested structure

Introduce the two dates and the place shown.
Give an overview of the main features that remain and the overall scale of change.
Compare the upper and side areas, including the media room, hall, showers and storage.
Describe the lower rooms and note the café/restaurant and ticket-office changes.
Finish with the features that remain in the same position.

Useful vocabulary & examples

remain in the same position: to stay in the same location in both plans
The auditorium remained in the same position in both years.
be relocated to: to be moved to a different place
The media room was relocated to the left side of the theater.
be replaced by: to be removed and have something else put in its place
The café was replaced by a restaurant area.
occupy the upper area: to be situated in the top section of a plan
The hall occupied the upper area in 2012.

Task Prompt

The plans below show a theater in 2010 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

User Essay Analysis

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Band 5.0

The two maps give information about a theater changed between 2010 and 2012. Overall, it is clear that the theater in 2012 became larger than the theater in 2010 with the expansion its upper and lower sections. Besides, all of its facilites were relocated, except for the stage the auditorium. First of all, the top section contained the media room, which stretched across the building. The stage was directly below it, and the auditorium was below the stage. Storage was situated along the left side of the first two areas. In the lower part, the admin office and ticket office were at the left, while a café was on the right. In 2012, a hall occupied the top section, with the stage and auditorium beneath it. Media was moved to the left side and storage to the right; showers were added on the left. The lower left contained an admin office and restaurants, while the ticket office was on the lower right. The café was replaced by restaurants. The main entrance remained near the centre at the bottom. The auditorium also had more rows of chairs in 2012.

Targeted Improvement Tips

Replace the broad claim that the theater “became larger” with a summary grounded in visible changes, such as the new hall and showers, the restaurants replacing the café, and the extra rows of seats.

Group details by year: describe the 2010 arrangement first, then compare it with the 2012 layout, especially the relocated media and storage areas and the ticket office changing sides.

Proofread the first paragraph for spelling and missing grammar words: check “facilities,” add “of” after “expansion,” and use “and” when naming both the stage and auditorium.

AI Feedback

Overall Band

5.0

Modest

Words

188

Type

Map

Criteria Breakdown

Task Achievement

5.0 Band

You identify the two years and report several relevant changes, including the new hall, showers and restaurants, the ticket office moving to the lower right, and the extra rows of chairs. However, “became larger” is not clearly demonstrated by the plans, and “all of its facilites were relocated” overstates the changes. Next, describe the visible additions and room movements precisely, and avoid claims about overall size unless the diagrams clearly support them.

Coherence & Cohesion

5.0 Band

The response moves from an overview to room-by-room details, and the repeated time marker “In 2012” helps distinguish the plans. The description is generally understandable, but “First of all” introduces only one numbered-style point, and the movement between the lower areas could be clearer. Next, organise the body into one paragraph for the 2010 layout and one for 2012, using direct comparisons between corresponding facilities.

Lexical Resource

4.5 Band

You use relevant map vocabulary such as “stage,” “auditorium,” “lower right,” and “replaced,” which makes many details specific. Some wording is imprecise: “give information about a theater changed” is awkward, while “became larger” and “all ... were relocated” are broad descriptions. “Facilites” is also misspelled. Next, learn accurate change verbs such as “was moved,” “was added,” and “was replaced,” and check spelling before finishing.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

4.5 Band

Most of the room descriptions use understandable simple past forms, for example “The café was replaced by restaurants.” However, the opening “a theater changed” needs a different grammatical structure, “with the expansion its upper” is missing “of,” and “the stage the auditorium” needs a joining word. These errors weaken otherwise clear meaning. Next, proofread noun phrases and check that each list or comparison has the necessary articles and conjunctions.

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