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Writing Academic Task 2 Band 9.0 Example

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Task 2

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  • Zoos may support conservation through breeding programmes and care for animals that cannot safely return to the wild.
  • Captivity can limit animals’ movement and natural behaviour, while noise and visitor contact may cause stress.
  • A balanced position can distinguish entertainment-focused zoos from rescue centres or carefully managed conservation programmes.

Suggested structure

  1. Introduce the disagreement and state your own position clearly.
  2. Explain the strongest argument for zoos, using conservation or education as a reason.
  3. Explain the opposing welfare argument and its consequences for animals.
  4. Give your judgement, clarify any exception you accept, and conclude with a practical alternative.
Useful vocabulary & examples
breeding programme
An organised effort to help animals reproduce, often to support a threatened population.

A carefully managed breeding programme may help maintain the population of an endangered species.

animal welfare
The health, comfort and quality of life of animals.

Animal welfare should be central to any decision about keeping wild animals in captivity.

natural habitat
The place and environment where an animal normally lives in the wild.

Protecting a natural habitat can allow wild animals to live and reproduce with greater freedom.

return to the wild
To release an animal back into its natural environment when it can survive there.

Some rescued animals may be able to return to the wild after treatment.

Task Prompt

Some people think that zoos are cruel and should be closed down. Others, however, believe that zoos can be useful in protecting wild animals. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Band 9.0

The debate surrounding the ethical implications of zoos has garnered considerable attention, with opinions sharply divided between those who advocate for their preservation and those who deem them inhumane and call for their closure. This essay will explore both perspectives while ultimately asserting that the prevailing deficiencies in the living conditions of many captive animals justify serious concern and a need for change.

The case for closure begins with the conditions of captivity. An enclosure may restrict movement and prevent animals from following patterns of behaviour they would display elsewhere. A visitor's enjoyment is not, by itself, a sufficient answer to that concern. If a facility keeps animals mainly as attractions and gives little attention to their needs, the fact that it calls itself educational does not make the conditions acceptable.

Supporters respond that some facilities can contribute to protecting threatened species. Carefully managed breeding and specialist care may have a purpose beyond entertainment. A zoo may also help visitors understand why habitats need protection. These possibilities explain why supporters do not regard every institution as equivalent. The relevant question is what a particular facility actually does, not whether its publicity uses the language of conservation.

There are limits to this defence. Preserving an animal in captivity is not the same as protecting its natural habitat, and a breeding programme is not automatically a route to successful release. Resources directed towards a collection should be assessed against other conservation options. Facilities should therefore provide evidence of their work and suitable conditions rather than expect the public to accept a broad claim of usefulness.

My view is that welfare should be a condition of operation, not a benefit to be traded away for ticket income. Where good care and genuine protective work can be shown, retaining a facility may be justified. Where they cannot, closure and responsible arrangements for the animals are more appropriate. This avoids assuming either that all zoos are cruel or that all zoos protect wildlife.

In conclusion, I favour closing zoos that keep animals in unsuitable conditions. Possible conservation benefits cannot justify retaining a facility that fails to provide acceptable care.

Targeted Improvement Tips

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Use the direct opening to answer the precise task and keep that judgement consistent.
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Develop a relevant example through cause and consequence rather than leaving it as a name or list item.
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Check the quoted clauses in context and qualify statements that imply a guaranteed outcome.

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