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Writing Academic Task 2 Band 9.0 Example

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319 words AcademicTask 2
Task 2

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Ideas to explore

  • Schools provide foundational skills and reach nearly all children.
  • Adult learning can help workers retrain and parents participate in community life.
  • Prioritise essential school provision, then support targeted adult courses.

Suggested structure

  1. Introduce both priorities and state your position.
  2. Explain the case for schools with a concrete example.
  3. Explain the case for adult centres and a funding condition.
  4. Restate how the priorities can be balanced.
Useful vocabulary & examples
a qualified judgement
a conclusion with stated limits

Children’s schools should receive a secure basic level of funding, while targeted adult learning centres also deserve support. I favour allocating additional money according to local needs rather than treating the two groups as competitors.

practical consequences
effects on ordinary decisions or activities

Children’s schools should receive a secure basic level of funding, while targeted adult learning centres also deserve support. I favour allocating additional money according to local needs rather than treating the two groups as competitors.

a realistic alternative
another option that can work in the circumstances

Children’s schools should receive a secure basic level of funding, while targeted adult learning centres also deserve support. I favour allocating additional money according to local needs rather than treating the two groups as competitors.

Answer analysis

Task Response

The position is explicit and qualified throughout. Each view is developed through a distinct causal explanation rather than a list of benefits.

Coherence & Cohesion

The argument moves from foundational obligations to immediate adult needs and then a decision rule that reconciles them.

Lexical Resource & Grammar

Controlled contrasts, conditional language and concrete examples support precision without relying on ornamental vocabulary.

Task Prompt

Some people think local governments should spend more money on public learning centres for adults. Others believe this money should be used to improve schools for children. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. Write at least 250 words.

User Essay Analysis

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Band 9.0

Whether an education budget should favour adult learning centres or children’s schools depends partly on what each currently lacks. I would give priority to ensuring that schools can provide a sound basic education, while reserving support for adult programmes that meet needs the school system cannot address.

The strongest case for school investment is that early disadvantages compound. A pupil who struggles to read may also fail to understand a science textbook or a written mathematics problem. Adequate staffing and timely support can interrupt this process before it shapes the child’s entire educational experience. Schools also serve children irrespective of their parents’ willingness or ability to purchase extra tuition. Where classrooms are overcrowded or essential materials are missing, directing money elsewhere would therefore leave a fundamental public responsibility unmet.

Adult learning, however, answers a different and equally real problem. Improving a school will not equip a recently unemployed shop assistant to use the software required by a local employer. Nor will it help an adult with limited literacy complete an application form next month. A nearby centre with affordable, flexible courses can turn education into an immediate opportunity. Its value should be judged against these practical outcomes, rather than dismissed because its students have already had the chance to attend school.

The two priorities need not imply an equal division of funds. Councils should first establish the minimum resources schools require, then assess adult courses against local demand, accessibility and likely benefit. A small evening programme with a clear employment pathway may warrant support, whereas a costly centre offering courses with little uptake may not. This approach protects children without treating adults’ needs as an afterthought.

In conclusion, essential school provision deserves priority, but age alone is a poor guide to every subsequent funding decision. Once that foundation is secure, targeted adult education can close gaps that better schools, however valuable, will not close in time for today’s learners.

Targeted Improvement Tips

1
Use the direct opening to answer the precise task and keep that judgement consistent.
2
Develop a relevant example through cause and consequence rather than leaving it as a name or list item.
3
Check the quoted clauses in context and qualify statements that imply a guaranteed outcome.

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