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Writing Academic Task 1 Band 7.0 Example

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195 words AcademicTask 1Line Graph

Task 1

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Compare the overall upward direction with differences in pace: Malaysia rises steadily, while Indonesia’s growth accelerates after 2000.
Highlight meaningful exceptions to a simple upward trend, especially the Philippines’ fall after 1990 and Thailand’s extended plateau.
Use the final-year figures to compare the projected ranking: Malaysia is highest, Indonesia next, the Philippines below it, and Thailand lowest.

Suggested structure

Paraphrase the graph’s subject, countries, and time span in the introduction.
Give an overview of the overall direction and the main contrast in projected levels.
Describe starting values and Malaysia’s steady rise.
Compare the Philippines’ dip and recovery with Indonesia’s stronger later growth.
Finish the detailed comparison with Thailand’s plateau and forecast increase.

Useful vocabulary & examples

urban population share: the percentage of a population living in cities
Malaysia’s urban population share is projected to exceed 80% by 2040.
reach a peak: attain the highest point in a period
The Philippines reached a peak of about 48% in 1990.
remain broadly stable: stay at a similar level, with little overall change
Thailand’s figure remained broadly stable near 30% for several years.
be projected to: be expected or forecast to happen
Indonesia’s urban share is projected to reach about 64% in 2040.

Task Prompt

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in 4 Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040

User Essay Analysis

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Band 7.0

The provided line graph illustrates the urban population percentages of the Philippines, Malaysia, Thailand, and Indonesia from 1970 to 2020, with projections for 2030 and 2040. Overall, the Philippines had the highest urban population percentages, with a substantial increase from 1970 to 2040. In contrast, Indonesia had the lowest urbanization rate, while Malaysia and Thailand showed different trends. In 1970, the Philippines stood at about 32%, compared with roughly 30% in Malaysia, 18% in Thailand and 13% in Indonesia. The figures later in the period, however, do not support the claim that Indonesia had the lowest rate throughout: it began lowest but climbed rapidly, becoming the second-highest country by 2040. Malaysia increased steadily, reaching 60% in 2000 and around 83% in 2040, the highest figure shown. Indonesia also rose sharply, from about 30% in 2000 to 64% by 2040. The Philippines peaked at just under 50% in 1990, fell to around 43% in 2010, then recovered to approximately 56% in 2040. Thailand grew more gradually, remaining near 30–33% between 1990 and 2020 before rising to 50% in 2040. Thus, Malaysia led from 2000 onward, while Thailand had the lowest projected figure at the end.

Targeted Improvement Tips

Rewrite the overview to say that Malaysia becomes the clear leader from 2000 onward, while Thailand has the lowest projected figure in 2040.

Check each ranking against the relevant year: Indonesia starts lowest but rises above Thailand and the Philippines by 2040.

Organise the details around contrasting patterns: Malaysia’s steady climb, Indonesia’s later rapid growth, the Philippines’ rise and dip, and Thailand’s slower increase.

AI Feedback

Overall Band

7.0

Good

Words

195

Type

Line Graph

Criteria Breakdown

Task Achievement

5.5 Band

The response covers all four countries and gives useful comparisons, including that Malaysia reached “around 83% in 2040.” However, the overview says “the Philippines had the highest” and that “Indonesia had the lowest” without limiting those claims to particular years; neither is true across the full period. The later correction helps, but leaves the overview contradictory. Next, state the overall ranking and trend accurately before selecting key turning points.

Coherence & Cohesion

6.0 Band

The answer follows a sensible overview-then-details sequence, and the country-by-country comparisons make the figures easy to follow. The contrast between “Indonesia had the lowest urbanization rate” and the later statement that the data do not support that claim disrupts the progression. Grouping the main trends by rising steadily, fluctuating, and rising later would also make comparisons more direct. Revise the overview first, then ensure each detail paragraph develops it.

Lexical Resource

7.0 Band

The response uses relevant chart language such as “projections,” “peaked,” “recovered,” and “rose sharply,” with enough variety to describe different patterns. “Urban population percentages” and “urbanization rate” are understandable, though repeating these broad labels can be less precise than naming the share of people living in cities. Use trend verbs selectively and distinguish a steady increase from a sharp rise or a temporary fall.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

7.0 Band

There is good control of complex sentences and comparison structures, for example, “The Philippines peaked …, fell …, then recovered.” The continuation is also grammatically clear when it qualifies the earlier claim with “do not support the claim … throughout.” The main improvement is not sentence-level accuracy but editing for consistency: make sure pronouns and comparisons refer to the same time span, and check that the overview does not conflict with the details.

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