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Writing Academic Task 1 Band 6.0 Example

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206 words AcademicTask 1Line Graph

Task 1

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Compare the overall upward direction with differences in pace: Malaysia rises steadily, while Indonesia’s growth accelerates after 2000.
Highlight meaningful exceptions to a simple upward trend, especially the Philippines’ fall after 1990 and Thailand’s extended plateau.
Use the final-year figures to compare the projected ranking: Malaysia is highest, Indonesia next, the Philippines below it, and Thailand lowest.

Suggested structure

Paraphrase the graph’s subject, countries, and time span in the introduction.
Give an overview of the overall direction and the main contrast in projected levels.
Describe starting values and Malaysia’s steady rise.
Compare the Philippines’ dip and recovery with Indonesia’s stronger later growth.
Finish the detailed comparison with Thailand’s plateau and forecast increase.

Useful vocabulary & examples

urban population share: the percentage of a population living in cities
Malaysia’s urban population share is projected to exceed 80% by 2040.
reach a peak: attain the highest point in a period
The Philippines reached a peak of about 48% in 1990.
remain broadly stable: stay at a similar level, with little overall change
Thailand’s figure remained broadly stable near 30% for several years.
be projected to: be expected or forecast to happen
Indonesia’s urban share is projected to reach about 64% in 2040.

Task Prompt

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in 4 Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040

User Essay Analysis

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Band 6.0

The graph illustrates the proportions of people residing in cities in four different Asian countries between 1970 and 2020, along with the foresee in 2030 and 2040. Overall, all four nations experienced an upward trend and are expected to reach the peak in the end. The percentage of both Malaysia and the Philippines started at about 30% in 1970, whereas Indonesia and Thailand were lower, at roughly 13% and 18%, respectively. Malaysia’s figure increased steadily throughout the period, reaching around 60% in 2000 and approximately 83% by 2040, the highest level shown. The Philippines rose to just under 50% in 1990, before falling gradually to about 42% in 2010. It then recovered, and is forecast to reach roughly 56% in 2040. Indonesia also grew overall: its proportion climbed from around 13% to 30% between 1970 and 2000, then rose more quickly to about 43% in 2010 and is projected to finish at approximately 64%. Thailand increased more slowly for much of the period, moving from about 18% in 1970 to around one third in 2020. Its figure is predicted to rise to 50% by 2040. Thus, Malaysia remains highest in the later years, while Thailand is expected to have the lowest urban population share in 2040.

Targeted Improvement Tips

Replace the overview’s claim about a peak with the accurate main picture: all four urban population shares rise overall, and Malaysia is highest at the end.

Check noun forms and agreement in the opening, especially “foresee” and “percentage of both,” before drafting the detailed comparisons.

Group comparisons by trend: contrast Malaysia’s steady rise with the Philippines’ dip and recovery, then compare Indonesia’s faster later growth with Thailand’s slower increase.

AI Feedback

Overall Band

6.0

Competent

Words

206

Type

Line Graph

Criteria Breakdown

Task Achievement

6.0 Band

The continuation includes the main trends and useful comparisons, such as Malaysia reaching “approximately 83% by 2040” and Thailand being “around one third in 2020.” However, the preserved overview says all countries “are expected to reach the peak,” which is not supported: the graph shows continued rises, not a clear peak. Next, describe the overall rise and identify Malaysia as highest without claiming a peak.

Coherence & Cohesion

6.5 Band

The response moves from an overview to country-level details, and time markers such as “between 1970 and 2000” make the sequence easy to follow. The later comparison, “Malaysia remains highest,” also gives the report a useful closing point. However, the overview’s peak claim conflicts with the steady increases described later. Revise that overview so it accurately previews the comparisons that follow.

Lexical Resource

6.0 Band

There is relevant variety in phrases such as “increased steadily,” “rose more quickly,” and “is projected to finish,” which helps distinguish different patterns. The preserved wording “along with the foresee” is an incorrect form, and “reach the peak in the end” is an imprecise description of these rising lines. Use “forecasts” and describe the highest figures or continuing growth instead.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

5.5 Band

The continuation uses several well-controlled comparative and time clauses, including “before falling gradually to about 42% in 2010.” The preserved phrase “The percentage of both Malaysia and the Philippines” has a singular noun where the comparison calls for “percentages,” while “along with the foresee” is also ungrammatical. Check agreement and word forms during revision, especially in the opening sentences.

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