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Writing Academic Task 1 Band 5.0 Example

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Task 1

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The coast grows overall despite a small dip between 1987 and 1992, then finishes with the highest visitor total.
The lakes show the largest fluctuation: a sharp rise to a 2002 peak followed by a substantial fall.
The mountains remain the least visited area at the end, but their numbers increase gradually rather than decline.

Suggested structure

Introduce the graph, its subject, locations and time period.
Give an overview of the broad trends, the lakes’ peak and the final ranking.
Describe the coast’s starting point, brief decline and subsequent rise.
Compare the mountains’ steady increase with the lakes’ rise and later fall.

Useful vocabulary & examples

rose steadily: increased gradually over a period
Visitor numbers for the mountains rose steadily from about 20,000 to 35,000.
peaked at: reached the highest point
The number of visitors to the lakes peaked at approximately 75,000 in 2002.
fell to: decreased and reached a particular level
The lakes’ figure fell to around 50,000 by 2007.
ended as the most popular destination: had the highest visitor figure at the end of the period
The coast ended as the most popular destination, at about 75,000 visitors.

Task Prompt

The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

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Band 5.0

The line chart illustrates the amount of tourist that visited three different areas in a European country from 1987 to 2007. Overall, all these areas witnessed an increase in the number of visitors during this 20 years; for the coast and the lakes it was higher compared to the mountains where tourism slightly increased. The mountains received about 20,000 visitors in 1987, and this figure rose gradually to around 35,000 by 2007. It was the least popular area throughout the period. The coast began at approximately 40,000 visitors, fell slightly to 35,000 in 1992, and then climbed steadily, reaching 45,000 in 1997 and 60,000 in 2002. It ended at about 75,000, the highest figure among the three areas in 2007. The lakes started with only 10,000 visitors in 1987, but their numbers increased quickly to 30,000 in 1992 and 40,000 in 1997. They then rose sharply to a peak of about 75,000 in 2002, before falling to 50,000 at the end of the period. Thus, the lakes experienced the largest fluctuation, while the mountains had the smallest overall increase.

Targeted Improvement Tips

Write a one-sentence overview that identifies the coast’s and lakes’ substantial overall rises, the mountains’ smaller rise, and the lakes’ peak followed by a fall.

Check countable nouns and time phrases in the opening: use “number of tourists” and “over these 20 years.”

Compare the series using approximate values at shared years, especially the lakes’ 2002 peak of about 75,000 against the coast’s rise to about 75,000 in 2007.

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Overall Band

5.0

Modest

Words

191

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Criteria Breakdown

Task Achievement

5.0 Band

The overview identifies an overall rise and notes that the mountains grew less, while the continuation gives the key peaks and ending values, including the lakes’ fall from about 75,000 to 50,000. However, “for the coast and the lakes it was higher” is unclear about what was higher, and the overview could more directly compare the final figures. Next, state the main ranking and exceptional lake trend in one precise overview.

Coherence & Cohesion

5.5 Band

The completed answer moves from an overview to separate descriptions of the mountains, coast and lakes, making the series easy to locate. Phrases such as “By contrast” or “Meanwhile” could make the shifts between series more explicit; the current sequence of area-by-area paragraphs is not marked with paragraph breaks either. Next, group the overview separately and use concise transitions to guide the reader between comparisons.

Lexical Resource

5.0 Band

The answer uses relevant trend language, including “rose gradually,” “climbed steadily,” “rose sharply” and “peak.” However, “amount of tourist” is an inaccurate collocation, and the repeated use of “visitors” and “figure” limits variety. Next, use accurate countable-noun phrasing such as “number of tourists” and select a few precise alternatives like “visitor total” without forcing synonyms.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

4.5 Band

The continuation includes several controlled past-tense sentences, for example, “It ended at about 75,000,” and uses clauses to describe changes. The preserved opening contains clear errors in “during this 20 years” and the singular “tourist” after “amount”; the overview comparison is also difficult to parse. Next, practise plural forms and time expressions, then read the opening aloud while checking each sentence’s subject and comparison structure.

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