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Writing Academic Task 1 Band 9.0 Example

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189 words AcademicTask 1Pie Chart

Task 1

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Renewables rose from 15.0% in 2014 to 26.2% in 2018, the most notable increase.
Coal fell from 28.4% to 18.1%, while nuclear declined slightly from 22.5% to 21.6%.
Gas remained the largest category at 30.1% in both years; Oil and Other stayed at 4.0%.

Suggested structure

Introduce the two pie charts, the UK, the years and the percentage measure.
Give an overview highlighting the main increase, the main decrease and stable categories.
Compare the 2014 shares, grouping the larger sources before the smaller ones.
Describe the 2018 figures and directly compare them with 2014.

Useful vocabulary & examples

accounted for: made up a particular proportion of the total
Gas accounted for 30.1% of energy generation in both years.
remained unchanged: stayed at the same level
The share for Oil and Other remained unchanged at 4.0%.
recorded the largest increase: showed the biggest rise in the figures
Renewables recorded the largest increase between 2014 and 2018.
fell by 10.3 percentage points: decreased by the difference between two percentage values
Coal fell by 10.3 percentage points, from 28.4% to 18.1%.

Task Prompt

The pie chart below shows the energy generation by fuel type in the UK over two years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

User Essay Analysis

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Band 9.0

The pie chart illustrates the energy generation from five different types of fuel in two separate years, 2014 and 2018. In general, the proportion of energy manufactured from renewables experienced an upward trend, while coal and nuclear showed the reverse. Notably, energy generation from oil and other, as well as from gas remained stable throughout the period, at 4.0% and 30.1%, respectively. The most striking change was in renewables, whose share rose from 15.0% in 2014 to 26.2% in 2018, an increase of 11.2 percentage points. As a result, renewables became the second-largest source by 2018, overtaking coal and nuclear. Coal recorded the sharpest fall, declining from 28.4% to 18.1%, a drop of 10.3 percentage points. Nuclear also decreased, but only slightly, from 22.5% to 21.6%. Gas supplied 30.1% in both years and was the largest source in 2014 and 2018. Oil and Other made up the smallest share, unchanged at 4.0%. Overall, the figures show a shift away from coal and nuclear towards renewable energy, while the contributions of gas and Oil and Other were unchanged.

Targeted Improvement Tips

In the overview, state the three principal patterns directly: renewables increased, coal and nuclear decreased, and gas and Oil and Other stayed level.

Use “percentage points” for differences between the chart percentages; for example, renewables rose by 11.2 percentage points.

Group the larger changes first, then report the two unchanged categories together, using the chart’s exact category labels.

AI Feedback

Overall Band

9.0

Excellent

Words

189

Type

Pie Chart

Criteria Breakdown

Task Achievement

8.0 Band

The response identifies the main pattern accurately: renewables grew, coal and nuclear declined, and gas and Oil and Other were unchanged. It also reports the key figures, including the 11.2-percentage-point rise in renewables and the larger fall in coal. The opening refers to five fuel types, consistent with the charts. To refine it further, use “share” consistently and ensure the overview is phrased as a clear comparison rather than an “upward trend.”

Coherence & Cohesion

7.5 Band

The answer moves from an overview to specific comparisons and ends with a concise summary, so the reader can follow the main message. Grouping the two stable categories together is useful, and the figures for renewables, coal and nuclear are clearly contrasted. However, the opening sentence about stability is followed by several details that could be organised more deliberately. Consider presenting the unchanged categories together after the larger changes, then finish with one concise overview rather than repeating the summary.

Lexical Resource

7.0 Band

There is a useful range of comparison language, including “sharpest fall,” “slightly,” “unchanged” and “second-largest source.” These choices help distinguish the scale of the changes. Some wording in the preserved opening is less natural for this topic: “energy manufactured” is not the usual collocation, and “oil and other” is less clear than the chart category “Oil and Other.” Prefer precise expressions such as “share of energy generated” and use chart labels consistently.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

7.5 Band

The response uses varied sentence forms, including a relative clause in “renewables, whose share rose” and a contrast in “but only slightly.” The continuation also handles numerical comparisons and punctuation clearly. In the preserved opening, the comma in “oil and other, as well as from gas remained” interrupts the subject phrase, making the sentence harder to parse. Check commas around linking phrases and keep the subject structure parallel when listing fuel categories.

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