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Writing Academic Task 1 Band 8.0 Example

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183 words AcademicTask 1Pie Chart

Task 1

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Renewables rose from 15.0% in 2014 to 26.2% in 2018, the most notable increase.
Coal fell from 28.4% to 18.1%, while nuclear declined slightly from 22.5% to 21.6%.
Gas remained the largest category at 30.1% in both years; Oil and Other stayed at 4.0%.

Suggested structure

Introduce the two pie charts, the UK, the years and the percentage measure.
Give an overview highlighting the main increase, the main decrease and stable categories.
Compare the 2014 shares, grouping the larger sources before the smaller ones.
Describe the 2018 figures and directly compare them with 2014.

Useful vocabulary & examples

accounted for: made up a particular proportion of the total
Gas accounted for 30.1% of energy generation in both years.
remained unchanged: stayed at the same level
The share for Oil and Other remained unchanged at 4.0%.
recorded the largest increase: showed the biggest rise in the figures
Renewables recorded the largest increase between 2014 and 2018.
fell by 10.3 percentage points: decreased by the difference between two percentage values
Coal fell by 10.3 percentage points, from 28.4% to 18.1%.

Task Prompt

The pie chart below shows the energy generation by fuel type in the UK over two years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

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Band 8.0

The pie charts compare the proportion of energy generated from five fuel sources, namely coal, gas, nuclear, renewables, and oil and other fuels in the UK from 2014 to 2018. Overall, the charts show noticeable shifts in energy production over the given period, with nuclear and coal fuels seeing declines, whereas the reverse was true of renewables, whose share rose substantially. In 2014, gas was the largest source, at 30.1%, closely followed by coal at 28.4%. Nuclear supplied 22.5%, while renewables accounted for 15%. Oil and other fuels made up the remaining 4%. By 2018, gas still contributed 30.1%, the highest proportion, while renewables had become the second-largest source at 26.2%. Nuclear output represented 21.6%, and coal fell to 18.1%. The share from oil and other fuels was unchanged at 4%. Across the period, renewables rose by 11.2 percentage points, the largest increase, whereas coal recorded the biggest fall, down 10.3 points. Nuclear declined only slightly by 0.9 points, and gas and oil and other fuels showed no change in their respective shares.

Targeted Improvement Tips

Use the overview to identify the unchanged categories as well as the main rises and falls; here, gas and oil and other fuels remain steady.

When comparing years, state the starting and ending percentages together, such as coal falling from 28.4% to 18.1%.

Use “percentage points” for differences between chart percentages, and avoid implying that the figures represent absolute energy quantities.

AI Feedback

Overall Band

8.0

Excellent

Words

183

Type

Pie Chart

Criteria Breakdown

Task Achievement

8.0 Band

The answer covers all five fuel categories and makes the key comparisons accurately: gas stays at “30.1%,” renewables rise from 15% to “26.2%,” and coal falls from 28.4% to 18.1%. The overview also identifies the main directions of change. To refine it further, describe the figures as shares of generation throughout, so the reader does not confuse proportions with absolute energy output.

Coherence & Cohesion

8.0 Band

The response moves clearly from the overview to the 2014 figures, then to 2018 and the changes across the period. Phrases such as “By 2018” and “Across the period” help signal these shifts, and the categories are easy to compare. The final change summary partly repeats earlier figures; a concise synthesis of the biggest rise and fall would make the ending even tighter.

Lexical Resource

7.5 Band

The answer uses relevant chart language, including “accounted for,” “second-largest source,” and “percentage points,” and it distinguishes the largest increase from the biggest fall. “Noticeable shifts in energy production” is broad, however, and “coal fuels” is less natural than naming coal directly. Prefer precise wording such as “the energy mix changed” and “coal and nuclear both declined.”

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

7.5 Band

There is a useful mix of complex and simple structures, for example “while renewables accounted for 15%” and “whereas coal recorded the biggest fall.” Most comparisons and numerical clauses are controlled. The wording “with nuclear and coal fuels seeing declines” is awkward, although its meaning is clear; revise the noun phrase to “with coal and nuclear both declining” for a cleaner construction.

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