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Writing Academic Task 1 Band 4.0 Example

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189 words AcademicTask 1Pie Chart

Task 1

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Renewables rose from 15.0% in 2014 to 26.2% in 2018, the most notable increase.
Coal fell from 28.4% to 18.1%, while nuclear declined slightly from 22.5% to 21.6%.
Gas remained the largest category at 30.1% in both years; Oil and Other stayed at 4.0%.

Suggested structure

Introduce the two pie charts, the UK, the years and the percentage measure.
Give an overview highlighting the main increase, the main decrease and stable categories.
Compare the 2014 shares, grouping the larger sources before the smaller ones.
Describe the 2018 figures and directly compare them with 2014.

Useful vocabulary & examples

accounted for: made up a particular proportion of the total
Gas accounted for 30.1% of energy generation in both years.
remained unchanged: stayed at the same level
The share for Oil and Other remained unchanged at 4.0%.
recorded the largest increase: showed the biggest rise in the figures
Renewables recorded the largest increase between 2014 and 2018.
fell by 10.3 percentage points: decreased by the difference between two percentage values
Coal fell by 10.3 percentage points, from 28.4% to 18.1%.

Task Prompt

The pie chart below shows the energy generation by fuel type in the UK over two years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

User Essay Analysis

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Band 4.0

In both pie charts, discussion about energy generation by fuel types in two yeas 2014 and 2018 in UK. In this types oil and others, nuclear, gas, coal, and renewable energy generation by fuel types are entered. In 2014, coal energy generation by fuel type use is 28.4%, gas energy generation used is 30.1%, nuclear energy generation was 22.5%, and renewable was 15%, while oil and other is only 4%. In 2018, gas still used 30.1% and it was the highest fuel. Renewable energy went up to 26.2%, become the second largest source, while nuclear decreased a little to 21.6%. Coal had a big fall from 28.4% to 18.1%, and oil and other stayed the same at 4.0%. Overall, gas generation was same in both years and remained the largest share in 2018. The most changes was renewable and coal. Renewable increased and coal reduced. The charts show that energy from renewable became more important in 2018, but gas also continue to be important. There is no major change in nuclear or oil and other, compared with the other fuels.

Targeted Improvement Tips

Begin with a complete paraphrase identifying the UK, the two years, and the chart’s subject.

Add a one-sentence overview stating that gas remained unchanged, renewables rose, and coal fell; then support it with the exact figures.

Proofread the finished response for verb forms and agreement, especially after percentage figures: for example, “renewable energy rose” and “the largest changes were.”

AI Feedback

Overall Band

4.0

Modest

Words

189

Type

Pie Chart

Criteria Breakdown

Task Achievement

5.0 Band

The response includes figures for all five categories in both years and identifies important movements, such as “Coal had a big fall from 28.4% to 18.1%.” Its overview correctly notes that gas stayed level and renewable energy gained importance. However, the opening does not clearly introduce the charts, and the key comparison—that gas was highest in both years—is only fully clear for 2018. Next, state the overall pattern directly before presenting details.

Coherence & Cohesion

4.5 Band

The answer moves from 2014 figures to 2018 figures and then gives an overall summary, so the reader can follow its basic plan. However, the introductory sentence “In this types…” is difficult to understand, and the ending repeats the increase in renewables and decrease in coal. Improve progression by using a clear introduction, a concise overview, and two grouped detail sentences comparing the years.

Lexical Resource

4.0 Band

Fuel names and numerical language make the subject recognisable, and “big fall” conveys the direction of coal’s change. Much of the wording is repetitive or imprecise, including “energy generation by fuel type use” and “renewable was 15%.” Use standard chart-reporting collocations such as “accounted for,” “share,” and “rose to,” and name each category consistently as a source.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

3.5 Band

The answer communicates several comparisons, but frequent sentence-level errors affect clarity. Examples include “two yeas,” “In this types,” “Renewable energy went up to 26.2%, become,” and “The most changes was.” These show problems with spelling, articles, agreement, and verb forms. After drafting, check each sentence for a subject and correctly formed verb, then proofread singular and plural nouns.

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