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Writing Academic Task 1 Band 8.0 Example

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165 words AcademicTask 1Pie Chart

Task 1

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Renewables rose from 15.0% in 2014 to 26.2% in 2018, the most notable increase.
Coal fell from 28.4% to 18.1%, while nuclear declined slightly from 22.5% to 21.6%.
Gas remained the largest category at 30.1% in both years; Oil and Other stayed at 4.0%.

Suggested structure

Introduce the two pie charts, the UK, the years and the percentage measure.
Give an overview highlighting the main increase, the main decrease and stable categories.
Compare the 2014 shares, grouping the larger sources before the smaller ones.
Describe the 2018 figures and directly compare them with 2014.

Useful vocabulary & examples

accounted for: made up a particular proportion of the total
Gas accounted for 30.1% of energy generation in both years.
remained unchanged: stayed at the same level
The share for Oil and Other remained unchanged at 4.0%.
recorded the largest increase: showed the biggest rise in the figures
Renewables recorded the largest increase between 2014 and 2018.
fell by 10.3 percentage points: decreased by the difference between two percentage values
Coal fell by 10.3 percentage points, from 28.4% to 18.1%.

Task Prompt

The pie chart below shows the energy generation by fuel type in the UK over two years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

User Essay Analysis

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Band 8.0

The pie charts illustrates the percentage of energy generation by different types of fuels in the UK in two separate years: 2014 and 2018. Overall, the proportion of gas generation was the highest, while that of oil and other fuels was had the lowest figure throughout the period. In addition, the figure for nuclear and gas generation showed contrasting patterns. Gas remained steady at 30.1% in both years, whereas nuclear fell slightly from 22.5% in 2014 to 21.6% in 2018. Coal was the second-largest source in 2014, at 28.4%, but its share declined to 18.1% four years later. By contrast, renewables rose substantially from 15.0% to 26.2%, becoming the second-largest source in 2018. Oil and other fuels accounted for the smallest share, at 4.0% in each year. Overall, the energy mix shifted away from coal towards renewables, while gas remained unchanged and the figures for nuclear and oil and other fuels changed little or not at all.

Targeted Improvement Tips

Before writing the overview, identify the highest and lowest categories in both years; state that gas led in both years and oil and other fuels remained lowest.

Compare the two major changes together: renewables rose from 15.0% to 26.2%, while coal fell from 28.4% to 18.1%.

Proofread the introduction and overview for subject–verb agreement and duplicated verbs, then remove any concluding sentence that repeats the overview.

AI Feedback

Overall Band

8.0

Excellent

Words

165

Type

Pie Chart

Criteria Breakdown

Task Achievement

7.5 Band

The answer identifies the main pattern accurately: “Gas remained steady at 30.1% in both years,” while renewables rose and coal declined. It also reports all five categories and their key percentages, including the unchanged 4.0% share for oil and other fuels. The overview is useful, though “the proportion of gas generation was the highest” could be more precise by noting that gas was highest in both years. Keep the summary focused on those contrasts.

Coherence & Cohesion

7.5 Band

The response moves from an introduction and overview to comparisons of the individual fuel types, then closes with the overall shift from coal to renewables. Connectors such as “By contrast” make the changing trends easy to follow. However, the final sentence repeats points already made in the overview, and “In addition” does not clearly signal the contrast between nuclear and gas. Use one concise overview and group related comparisons more deliberately.

Lexical Resource

7.0 Band

There is useful chart language in phrases such as “declined to 18.1%” and “becoming the second-largest source,” and the vocabulary distinguishes increases, decreases and stability. Some wording is less natural or precise: “different types of fuels” is unnecessarily wordy, and “the proportion of gas generation was the highest” is cumbersome. Prefer concise reporting verbs and terms such as “share,” “remained stable” and “rose.”

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

6.5 Band

The completed response uses comparison structures effectively, for example “whereas nuclear fell slightly from 22.5% in 2014 to 21.6% in 2018.” However, the preserved opening contains two clear errors: “The pie charts illustrates” has subject–verb disagreement, and “was had” duplicates the verb. These errors occur in prominent sentences and reduce grammatical accuracy. Proofread each clause for a plural subject and a single finite verb before submitting.

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