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Writing Academic Task 1 Band 5.0 Example

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182 words AcademicTask 1Pie Chart

Task 1

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Renewables rose from 15.0% in 2014 to 26.2% in 2018, the most notable increase.
Coal fell from 28.4% to 18.1%, while nuclear declined slightly from 22.5% to 21.6%.
Gas remained the largest category at 30.1% in both years; Oil and Other stayed at 4.0%.

Suggested structure

Introduce the two pie charts, the UK, the years and the percentage measure.
Give an overview highlighting the main increase, the main decrease and stable categories.
Compare the 2014 shares, grouping the larger sources before the smaller ones.
Describe the 2018 figures and directly compare them with 2014.

Useful vocabulary & examples

accounted for: made up a particular proportion of the total
Gas accounted for 30.1% of energy generation in both years.
remained unchanged: stayed at the same level
The share for Oil and Other remained unchanged at 4.0%.
recorded the largest increase: showed the biggest rise in the figures
Renewables recorded the largest increase between 2014 and 2018.
fell by 10.3 percentage points: decreased by the difference between two percentage values
Coal fell by 10.3 percentage points, from 28.4% to 18.1%.

Task Prompt

The pie chart below shows the energy generation by fuel type in the UK over two years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

User Essay Analysis

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Band 5.0

The pie chart gives information about how many different fuel sources were used in UK between 2014 and 2018. Overall, the amount of coal production reduced dramaticly, and nuclear energy also decreased slightly, while renewable energy production saw rapid increase. Additionally, gas production and oil and others remained stability. In 2014, gas was the dominant source, at 30.1% of energy generation. Coal was the second largest fuel, making up 28.4%, while nuclear accounted for 22.5%. Renewables had a smaller share, at 15%, and oil and other sources were the lowest, with 4%. In 2018, gas still generated 30.1%, so its proportion did not change. However, renewables rose to 26.2%, becoming the second largest source and nearly matching gas. In contrast, coal fell to 18.1%, a drop of 10.3 percentage points, and was then below both gas and renewables. Nuclear declined slightly to 21.6%. Oil and other sources remained unchanged at 4%. Overall, the main change was the shift from coal to renewable energy, while gas stayed stable and the smallest category did not vary.

Targeted Improvement Tips

Revise the opening to state that the charts show the percentage shares of energy generation, rather than how many fuel sources were used.

Check every figure against the chart and practise describing the main movements with precise terms such as “rose by,” “fell to,” and “remained unchanged.”

Before finishing, proofread for articles and word forms, especially patterns such as “a rapid increase,” “fell dramatically,” and “remained stable.”

AI Feedback

Overall Band

5.0

Modest

Words

182

Type

Pie Chart

Criteria Breakdown

Task Achievement

6.0 Band

The completed answer reports the main pattern and gives the chart figures accurately: for example, renewables rise from 15% to 26.2%, while coal falls from 28.4% to 18.1%. It also identifies the unchanged gas and oil-and-other shares. The opening phrase “how many different fuel sources” is imprecise because the charts compare proportions, not the number of fuels. Next, describe the figures as shares of generation from the outset.

Coherence & Cohesion

5.0 Band

The response moves from an overview to the 2014 figures and then the 2018 comparison, which makes the information easy to locate. The repeated “Overall” at the beginning and end is unnecessary, and “Additionally” does not clearly signal a comparison between categories. Grouping the stable figures together and contrasting the rises with the falls would make the progression more efficient. Use one concise overview, then organise details by the main changes.

Lexical Resource

5.0 Band

The answer uses relevant chart language, including “accounted for,” “proportion,” and “percentage points,” and distinguishes the fuel categories. However, “reduced dramaticly” contains a spelling error and sounds less natural than “fell sharply”; “remained stability” is also an incorrect form. “Amount of coal production” is imprecise for a pie-chart share. Learn a small set of accurate comparison collocations and use them consistently.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

4.5 Band

The continuation includes clear comparison structures, such as “while nuclear accounted for 22.5%” and “so its proportion did not change.” In the preserved opening, however, “used in UK,” “saw rapid increase,” and “remained stability” show errors with articles and word forms; “reduced dramaticly” also has an adverb-form problem. Review article use and adjective/adverb/noun patterns, then proofread each sentence for a complete, natural construction.

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