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Writing Academic Task 1 Band 5.0 Example

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182 words AcademicTask 1Pie Chart

Task 1

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Renewables rose from 15.0% in 2014 to 26.2% in 2018, the most notable increase.
Coal fell from 28.4% to 18.1%, while nuclear declined slightly from 22.5% to 21.6%.
Gas remained the largest category at 30.1% in both years; Oil and Other stayed at 4.0%.

Suggested structure

Introduce the two pie charts, the UK, the years and the percentage measure.
Give an overview highlighting the main increase, the main decrease and stable categories.
Compare the 2014 shares, grouping the larger sources before the smaller ones.
Describe the 2018 figures and directly compare them with 2014.

Useful vocabulary & examples

accounted for: made up a particular proportion of the total
Gas accounted for 30.1% of energy generation in both years.
remained unchanged: stayed at the same level
The share for Oil and Other remained unchanged at 4.0%.
recorded the largest increase: showed the biggest rise in the figures
Renewables recorded the largest increase between 2014 and 2018.
fell by 10.3 percentage points: decreased by the difference between two percentage values
Coal fell by 10.3 percentage points, from 28.4% to 18.1%.

Task Prompt

The pie chart below shows the energy generation by fuel type in the UK over two years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

User Essay Analysis

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Band 5.0

The pie chart gives information about how much electricity was generated from different sours of fuel in UK between 2014 and 2018. It is clear that, three categories remained the same, which were gas, oil and others, nuclear, but gas was by far the most significant source of energy. Coal saw slight, while, renewables increased. More precisely, the charts show that only gas and oil and other fuels remained unchanged; nuclear fell slightly. In 2014, gas was the largest source, at 30.1%, followed by coal at 28.4%. Nuclear accounted for 22.5%, while renewables supplied 15%. Oil and other fuels made up just 4%. By 2018, gas still generated 30.1% of electricity and remained the leading source. The clearest change was in renewables, whose share rose to 26.2%, making it the second-largest category. In contrast, coal fell to 18.1%, moving from second place to fourth. Nuclear declined slightly, from 22.5% to 21.6%, whereas oil and other fuels stayed at 4%. Overall, the figures show a shift away from coal towards renewables, while gas remained stable.

Targeted Improvement Tips

Write the overview only after checking each category in both pies: gas and oil and other fuels are unchanged, nuclear dips slightly, renewables rise, and coal falls.

Compare the main changes with percentage-point differences: renewables increase by 11.2 points and coal decreases by 10.3 points.

Proofread for article use, spelling and complete clauses; specifically check “the UK”, “sources” and the sentence describing coal.

AI Feedback

Overall Band

5.0

Modest

Words

182

Type

Pie Chart

Criteria Breakdown

Task Achievement

5.0 Band

You identify gas as the leading source and include the key 2014 and 2018 figures, such as “30.1%” and “26.2%”. The later clarification that “only gas and oil and other fuels remained unchanged” corrects the earlier inaccurate claim about three unchanged categories. However, the opening still contains contradictory chart information and “Coal saw slight” does not state the direction. Next, make the overview accurate before presenting the main comparisons.

Coherence & Cohesion

5.0 Band

The answer moves from an overview to figures for 2014 and then 2018, and the contrast signalled by “In contrast” helps show the coal decline. However, the early overview is difficult to follow: “gas, oil and others, nuclear” is an unclear list, and the subsequent correction interrupts the flow. Organise the opening into a concise overview of the unchanged categories and largest increases or decreases, then compare the years in a consistent order.

Lexical Resource

4.5 Band

There is useful chart vocabulary in “largest source”, “share rose” and “second-largest category”, which communicates changes and rankings. The spelling “sours” and phrasing “source of energy” where the chart concerns electricity generation weaken precision; “Coal saw slight” is also incomplete. Use accurate terms such as “share”, “percentage points” and “electricity generation”, and check spelling and collocations before submitting.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

4.5 Band

The answer uses some accurate comparison structures, including “whose share rose to 26.2%” and “moving from second place to fourth”. However, “It is clear that, three categories remained the same” has faulty punctuation, and “Coal saw slight, while, renewables increased” is grammatically incomplete and awkwardly punctuated. Practise writing complete subject–verb clauses, and use a clear pattern such as “Coal fell, while renewables rose.”

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