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Writing Academic Task 1 Band 7.0 Example

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189 words AcademicTask 1Pie Chart

Task 1

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Renewables rose from 15.0% in 2014 to 26.2% in 2018, the most notable increase.
Coal fell from 28.4% to 18.1%, while nuclear declined slightly from 22.5% to 21.6%.
Gas remained the largest category at 30.1% in both years; Oil and Other stayed at 4.0%.

Suggested structure

Introduce the two pie charts, the UK, the years and the percentage measure.
Give an overview highlighting the main increase, the main decrease and stable categories.
Compare the 2014 shares, grouping the larger sources before the smaller ones.
Describe the 2018 figures and directly compare them with 2014.

Useful vocabulary & examples

accounted for: made up a particular proportion of the total
Gas accounted for 30.1% of energy generation in both years.
remained unchanged: stayed at the same level
The share for Oil and Other remained unchanged at 4.0%.
recorded the largest increase: showed the biggest rise in the figures
Renewables recorded the largest increase between 2014 and 2018.
fell by 10.3 percentage points: decreased by the difference between two percentage values
Coal fell by 10.3 percentage points, from 28.4% to 18.1%.

Task Prompt

The pie chart below shows the energy generation by fuel type in the UK over two years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

User Essay Analysis

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Band 7.0

The pie charts provide information about the percentage of different types of sources in the UK in 2014 and 2018. Overall, while renewable energy exhibited an upward trend, the reverse was true for coal and nuclear power. Additionally, gas, oil, and others remained unchanged. Focusing on increasing first, the percentage of renewable energy in the two charts rose from 15.0% in 2014 to 26.2% in 2018, making it the most notable change among the fuels. Coal, by contrast, fell substantially from 28.4% to 18.1%, a decline of 10.3 percentage points. Nuclear energy also decreased, though only slightly, from 22.5% to 21.6%. Gas accounted for 30.1% of generation in both years, the largest share in each year. The proportion from oil and other sources was the smallest and remained at 4.0% throughout. In 2014, gas and coal together contributed 58.5% of total generation; by 2018, their combined share had fallen to 48.2%. Overall, the figures show a clear shift from coal towards renewable energy, while gas remained stable and the two smaller categories changed little or not at all.

Targeted Improvement Tips

Make the overview directly name the two largest changes: renewables rise by 11.2 percentage points, while coal falls by 10.3 percentage points.

Use one consistent label for the smallest category, following the chart legend: “Oil and Other” or “oil and other sources.”

Group the details by trend—rising, falling, then stable—and avoid repeating the overview in the final sentence.

AI Feedback

Overall Band

7.0

Good

Words

189

Type

Pie Chart

Criteria Breakdown

Task Achievement

7.0 Band

The response covers the main movements and supports them with accurate figures: renewables rise from 15.0% to 26.2%, while coal falls from 28.4% to 18.1%. It also identifies the stable 30.1% gas share and 4.0% oil-and-other share. The overview is relevant, though the answer could make the scale of renewables’ increase and coal’s decrease more explicit in its opening summary. Keep prioritising the largest changes.

Coherence & Cohesion

7.0 Band

The overview beginning “Overall, while renewable energy exhibited an upward trend” gives the response a clear direction, and the completed answer then groups the rising category before the declining and stable ones. Transitions such as “by contrast” help comparisons. However, “Focusing on increasing first” is an awkward signpost, and the answer repeats its overall message at the end. Use a more natural transition and let the closing comparison add information rather than restate the overview.

Lexical Resource

6.5 Band

There is useful task vocabulary in “upward trend,” “decline,” and “remained unchanged,” and the completed answer uses percentage-point comparisons appropriately. Some wording is broad or unnatural: “different types of sources” is less precise than naming the fuel categories, while “Focusing on increasing first” is not an idiomatic way to introduce a rising figure. Replace general wording with chart-specific terms such as “fuel sources” and concise comparison phrases.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

6.5 Band

The completed answer uses a mix of sentence structures, including the contrast in “while renewable energy exhibited an upward trend” and a semicolon joining related comparisons. The figures and their comparison clauses are generally expressed clearly. One awkward construction is “Focusing on increasing first,” and “the percentage … in the two charts rose” is less natural than saying the share increased between the years. Practise concise topic sentences followed by a correctly formed comparison.

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