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Writing Academic Task 1 Band 6.0 Example

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184 words AcademicTask 1Pie Chart

Task 1

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Renewables rose from 15.0% in 2014 to 26.2% in 2018, the most notable increase.
Coal fell from 28.4% to 18.1%, while nuclear declined slightly from 22.5% to 21.6%.
Gas remained the largest category at 30.1% in both years; Oil and Other stayed at 4.0%.

Suggested structure

Introduce the two pie charts, the UK, the years and the percentage measure.
Give an overview highlighting the main increase, the main decrease and stable categories.
Compare the 2014 shares, grouping the larger sources before the smaller ones.
Describe the 2018 figures and directly compare them with 2014.

Useful vocabulary & examples

accounted for: made up a particular proportion of the total
Gas accounted for 30.1% of energy generation in both years.
remained unchanged: stayed at the same level
The share for Oil and Other remained unchanged at 4.0%.
recorded the largest increase: showed the biggest rise in the figures
Renewables recorded the largest increase between 2014 and 2018.
fell by 10.3 percentage points: decreased by the difference between two percentage values
Coal fell by 10.3 percentage points, from 28.4% to 18.1%.

Task Prompt

The pie chart below shows the energy generation by fuel type in the UK over two years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

User Essay Analysis

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Band 6.0

The pie charts provide information on energy generation by different type of resource in the United Kingdom in 2014 and 2018. Overall, it is evident from the chart that the proportion of coal increased, while renewables’ percentage decreased over the whole research period. As to the detail, the figure for coal declined significantly to 18.1% in 2018, down from 28.4% in 2014. This was the largest change among the fuel sources shown. By contrast, renewables rose from 15.0% to 26.2%, an increase of 11.2 percentage points, and became the second-largest source in 2018. Gas remained unchanged at 30.1% in both years and was the biggest contributor in each chart. Nuclear accounted for 22.5% in 2014, then edged down to 21.6% four years later. Oil and other fuels made up the smallest share, at 4.0% in both years. Overall, the data show that generation shifted away from coal towards renewables, while gas and oil/other were stable and nuclear changed only slightly. These figures also show that the overall mix changed notably during this four-year period.

Targeted Improvement Tips

Before writing the overview, compare the start and end values for every category; explicitly check that each verb (rise, fall, remain stable) matches the chart.

Group the figures into changing categories (coal, renewables and nuclear) and unchanged categories (gas and oil/other) to avoid a list-like report.

Use percentage-point language for differences between shares: renewables increased by 11.2 percentage points, from 15.0% to 26.2%.

AI Feedback

Overall Band

6.0

Competent

Words

184

Type

Pie Chart

Criteria Breakdown

Task Achievement

5.5 Band

The completed answer reports the key figures, including coal falling from 28.4% to 18.1% and gas staying at 30.1%. However, the overview says “the proportion of coal increased” and renewables decreased, which reverses the chart’s main trends and conflicts with the later details. Make the overview your accurate summary first: coal and nuclear fell, renewables rose, and gas and oil/other stayed constant.

Coherence & Cohesion

5.5 Band

The response follows a clear overview-then-details order, and “By contrast” helps distinguish the coal and renewables changes. Its main cohesion problem is the contradiction between the initial overview and the later statement that generation “shifted away from coal towards renewables.” Replace the overview with the trends supported by the figures, then group stable categories together to make the comparison easier to follow.

Lexical Resource

6.0 Band

The answer uses relevant comparison language, including “declined significantly,” “remained unchanged,” and “edged down,” and correctly gives the increase as “11.2 percentage points.” Some phrasing is less natural for chart reporting: “different type of resource,” “the whole research period,” and “As to the detail.” Use concise alternatives such as “fuel types,” “between 2014 and 2018,” and “Regarding the figures” for a more precise report.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

6.0 Band

Most sentences are complete and the comparisons are generally expressed clearly, as in “Gas remained unchanged at 30.1% in both years.” The phrase “different type of resource” has a number-agreement problem, while “As to the detail” is an awkward construction. Check singular and plural forms when describing categories, and practise standard comparison frames such as “the figure for X fell from A to B.”

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