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Writing Academic Task 1 Band 6.0 Example

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176 words AcademicTask 1Pie Chart

Task 1

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Renewables rose from 15.0% in 2014 to 26.2% in 2018, the most notable increase.
Coal fell from 28.4% to 18.1%, while nuclear declined slightly from 22.5% to 21.6%.
Gas remained the largest category at 30.1% in both years; Oil and Other stayed at 4.0%.

Suggested structure

Introduce the two pie charts, the UK, the years and the percentage measure.
Give an overview highlighting the main increase, the main decrease and stable categories.
Compare the 2014 shares, grouping the larger sources before the smaller ones.
Describe the 2018 figures and directly compare them with 2014.

Useful vocabulary & examples

accounted for: made up a particular proportion of the total
Gas accounted for 30.1% of energy generation in both years.
remained unchanged: stayed at the same level
The share for Oil and Other remained unchanged at 4.0%.
recorded the largest increase: showed the biggest rise in the figures
Renewables recorded the largest increase between 2014 and 2018.
fell by 10.3 percentage points: decreased by the difference between two percentage values
Coal fell by 10.3 percentage points, from 28.4% to 18.1%.

Task Prompt

The pie chart below shows the energy generation by fuel type in the UK over two years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

User Essay Analysis

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Band 6.0

The pie chart illuminates energy generation by different types of fuels including fossil fuels, and alternative energy in the UK in 2014 and 2018. Overall, expect to the percentage of energy produce by renewable energy , nuclear, and coal, the energy generation by gas and oil stay constantly in both years of 2014 and 2018. In 2014, gas was the largest source, at 30.1%, followed by coal at 28.4%. Nuclear accounted for 22.5%, while renewables provided 15.0%; oil and other sources made up the remaining 4.0%. By 2018, renewables had risen to 26.2%, becoming the second-largest category after gas, which remained unchanged at 30.1%. Nuclear edged down slightly to 21.6%, and coal fell substantially to 18.1%. Oil and other fuels again represented 4.0%. Thus, the most notable shift was the increase in renewable energy alongside a marked decline in coal, while gas and oil/other showed no change and nuclear changed only marginally. Overall, the chart indicates a changing mix rather than a rise in every source.

Targeted Improvement Tips

Replace the opening overview with one complete sentence that identifies the largest category and the main changes: renewables rose, coal fell, and gas stayed the same.

Check each figure against the chart and present each year’s categories in a consistent order; include the unchanged 4.0% for oil and other sources.

After drafting, read each sentence for a clear subject and verb, then check trend expressions such as “remained constant” and “increased to.”

AI Feedback

Overall Band

6.0

Competent

Words

176

Type

Pie Chart

Criteria Breakdown

Task Achievement

6.0 Band

The response covers both years and reports the main movements accurately: renewables rise from 15.0% to 26.2%, while coal falls from 28.4% to 18.1%. It also identifies gas as unchanged at 30.1%. However, the opening overview, “expect to the percentage…,” is difficult to understand, and the answer could more clearly rank the main categories in both years. Next, state the overview in one clear sentence before giving the figures.

Coherence & Cohesion

5.5 Band

The response moves from an attempted overview to details for 2014 and then 2018, and “Thus, the most notable shift” usefully signals a comparison. The main obstacle is the opening’s run-on structure: “nuclear, and coal, the energy generation by gas and oil…” makes the relationship between the trends unclear. Grouping the figures by year, then ending with a concise comparison, would make the progression easier to follow.

Lexical Resource

5.5 Band

There is some appropriate chart vocabulary, including “accounted for,” “remained unchanged,” and “edged down slightly.” These phrases help describe proportions and trends precisely. However, “illuminates” is an unnatural choice for introducing a chart, and “types of fuels” is less direct than “fuel types.” Use standard reporting language and vary accurate trend verbs, such as “rose,” “declined,” and “remained stable,” rather than relying on awkward phrasing.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

5.0 Band

The continuation includes several well-formed comparative sentences, such as “Nuclear edged down slightly to 21.6%.” However, the preserved overview contains clear grammatical problems: “expect to the percentage,” “energy produce,” and “stay constantly.” The comma before “and alternative energy” is also unnecessary. Practise writing a complete overview with a subject and verb, then check verb forms and agreement—for example, “generation remained constant.”

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