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Writing Academic Task 1 Band 4.0 Example

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224 words AcademicTask 1Map
Task 1

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Ideas to explore

  • Identify what stayed constant: the stage, auditorium, fourteen chairs and central main entrance.
  • Track the storage room’s relocation from the left side in 2010 to the right side in 2012.
  • Compare the supporting rooms: the 2010 media room and café give way to a different arrangement including a hall, showers and restaurants in 2012.

Suggested structure

  1. Introduce the two dates and the place shown.
  2. Give an overview of the main features that remain and the overall scale of change.
  3. Compare the upper and side areas, including the media room, hall, showers and storage.
  4. Describe the lower rooms and note the café/restaurant and ticket-office changes.
  5. Finish with the features that remain in the same position.
Useful vocabulary & examples
remain in the same position
to stay in the same location in both plans

The auditorium remained in the same position in both years.

be relocated to
to be moved to a different place

The media room was relocated to the left side of the theater.

be replaced by
to be removed and have something else put in its place

The café was replaced by a restaurant area.

occupy the upper area
to be situated in the top section of a plan

The hall occupied the upper area in 2012.

Task Prompt

The plans below show a theater in 2010 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task 1 visual

User Essay Analysis

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Band 4.0

the two maps illustrate small theater before and after the changes of several facilities from 2010 to 2012. In general,it is obvious that the noticeable changes were in the bottom,while the central of the map remained unchanged over the period. In 2010,the media and the stage were located in the top of the map,and storage was on the left side next to these rooms. The auditorium was below the stage and contained twelve chairs. At the bottom, there were an admin office and a ticket office on the left, while a cafe was on the right of the main entrance.

In 2012, some rooms were moved or changed. The media room was on the left side, and storage was moved to the right side. A hall was added above the stage, while the stage was still between the hall and auditorium. The auditorium still had twelve chairs and was in the middle part, so this area did not change much. Showers were added on the left side near the auditorium.

The lower part also changed. The admin office remained on the left, and restaurants were added beside it. The ticket office moved from the left side to the right side of the entrance. The cafe from 2010 is not shown in 2012. Overall, the theater had more facilities in 2012.

Targeted Improvement Tips

1
Rewrite the overview to identify the main changes across the whole plan: the media and storage rooms change sides, a hall and showers appear, and the lower facilities are rearranged.
2
Use precise location phrases when comparing facilities, such as “on the left side,” “above the stage,” and “to the right of the entrance,” and check that each phrase matches the visual.
3
Before finishing, check every sentence for articles and punctuation, especially “a theater” and a space after each comma.

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