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Writing Academic Task 1 Band 5.0 Example

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167 words AcademicTask 1Map

Task 1

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Identify what stayed constant: the stage, auditorium, fourteen chairs and central main entrance.
Track the storage room’s relocation from the left side in 2010 to the right side in 2012.
Compare the supporting rooms: the 2010 media room and café give way to a different arrangement including a hall, showers and restaurants in 2012.

Suggested structure

Introduce the two dates and the place shown.
Give an overview of the main features that remain and the overall scale of change.
Compare the upper and side areas, including the media room, hall, showers and storage.
Describe the lower rooms and note the café/restaurant and ticket-office changes.
Finish with the features that remain in the same position.

Useful vocabulary & examples

remain in the same position: to stay in the same location in both plans
The auditorium remained in the same position in both years.
be relocated to: to be moved to a different place
The media room was relocated to the left side of the theater.
be replaced by: to be removed and have something else put in its place
The café was replaced by a restaurant area.
occupy the upper area: to be situated in the top section of a plan
The hall occupied the upper area in 2012.

Task Prompt

The plans below show a theater in 2010 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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Band 5.0

Overall, there were many changes in the theater, some were destructed or developed. Despite that, only the Auditorium was almost maintained. To begin with, the main entrance was extended. The storage room was transformed to the north – east room, made room for media, meanwhile media’ room was taken over by the hall. The admin office was retained in the lower-left section, where restaurants were added in 2012. The ticket office was relocated to the lower-right corner, while the café shown in 2010 was removed. In the earlier plan, the media room sat above the stage and the storage room was on its left; by 2012, media had moved to the north-west side and storage was on the north-east side. The hall occupied the upper section above the stage, while showers were introduced beside the auditorium. The auditorium remained in the centre, and its seating arrangement appears unchanged. The stage also remained, although the surrounding rooms were reorganised. The main entrance continued to be shown at the bottom.

Targeted Improvement Tips

Before writing, list what stayed and what changed: the auditorium and stage remain, while the café disappears and restaurants and showers appear.

Describe room positions accurately with a consistent frame of reference, such as “north-west,” “north-east,” “lower-left,” and “lower-right.”

Check each sentence for a complete clause and a clear connector; replace comma-linked changes with separate sentences or use “while” or “whereas” correctly.

AI Feedback

Overall Band

5.0

Modest

Words

167

Type

Map

Criteria Breakdown

Task Achievement

5.0 Band

The answer identifies several relevant changes, including that “restaurants were added in 2012” and that the café was removed. However, “only the Auditorium was almost maintained” overlooks the stage, which also remains, and the map does not clearly show the entrance being extended. The description of the media room and hall is also unclear. Next, compare each area directly across the two plans and prioritise changes that the visual clearly supports.

Coherence & Cohesion

5.0 Band

The response begins with an overview and then gives details about rooms and facilities, so the reader can follow a basic sequence. The phrase “In the earlier plan” usefully signals a comparison, but the opening detail sentence combines several room changes with “meanwhile,” making their relationships difficult to follow. The later return to the stage and entrance also feels repetitive. Group details by location or by 2010-to-2012 change, using one clear comparison per sentence.

Lexical Resource

4.5 Band

There is some suitable map vocabulary, such as “relocated,” “lower-left section,” and “reorganised.” However, “destructed” is not a natural choice here, and “transformed to the north – east room” does not express relocation clearly. “media’ room” also has an incorrect possessive form. Use precise verbs such as “moved,” “replaced,” and “added,” and use consistent compass-direction spelling such as “north-east.”

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

4.5 Band

The answer uses both simple sentences and a few longer comparisons, including “The auditorium remained in the centre, and its seating arrangement appears unchanged.” However, “some were destructed or developed” joins two clauses without suitable punctuation or a linking word, and “made room for media, meanwhile…” creates a faulty sentence connection. The phrase “media’ room” is also grammatically incorrect. Practise separating linked map changes into complete clauses with clear conjunctions.

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