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Task 1

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Compare the pace of adoption: refrigerator ownership rose especially quickly between 1940 and 1960, while washing-machine ownership changed more gradually.
Identify milestones in appliance ownership: refrigerators reached 100% by 1980, and vacuum cleaners did so by 2000.
Set the decline in housework hours alongside rising appliance ownership, while avoiding claims that the charts prove one trend caused the other.

Suggested structure

Introduce both charts, the measures shown and the 1920–2019 period.
Give an overview of the broad appliance-ownership increases and the fall in housework hours.
Compare the three appliances, highlighting their starting points and the years they reached universal ownership.
Describe the housework-hour decline chronologically, noting the plateau at 15 hours between 1980 and 2000.

Useful vocabulary & examples

household ownership: the proportion of households that have a particular item
Household ownership of refrigerators rose to 100% by 1980.
reach universal ownership: be owned by all households shown in the chart
Vacuum cleaners reached universal ownership in 2000.
edge down: decrease slightly
Washing-machine ownership edged down between 1960 and 1980.
remain at that level: stay unchanged at a previously stated figure
Housework time remained at 15 hours per week from 1980 to 2000.

Task Prompt

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time doing housework and households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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Band 5.0

The graphs showed the shifting of households percentage owning electrical appliances (washing machine, refrigerator, and vacuum cleaner) and household spent time (hours) on housework per week from 1920 to 2019. Overall, the ownership of three electrical appliances increased gradually throughout the periods, with a significant increase in 1940. In 2019, almost the households have refrigerator and vacuum cleaner; in fact, both figures reached 100%. The refrigerator had the sharpest early rise, from almost 0% in 1920 to 50% in 1940 and 90% in 1960. It then reached 100% in 1980 and remained at that level. Vacuum cleaner ownership rose steadily, from 30% in 1920 to 50% in 1940, 70% in 1960 and 90% in 1980, before reaching 100% in 2000. Washing machines were the most common appliance at the beginning, at 40%, and increased to 60% in 1940 and 70% in 1960. After a slight fall to about 65% in 1980, the figure climbed to 75% in 2019. In contrast, weekly housework hours fell overall, from 50 hours per household in 1920 to 35 in 1940 and 20 in 1960. The decline slowed thereafter, reaching 15 hours in 1980 and 2000, then about 10 hours by 2019.

Targeted Improvement Tips

Write an overview that names both main patterns: appliance ownership increased overall, while weekly housework hours declined substantially.

Check each series separately before describing it: washing-machine ownership dips from about 70% in 1960 to 65% in 1980, whereas the other appliance figures do not fall.

Proofread the opening with a checklist for articles, plural nouns, and past tense; use “the percentage of households owning…” and “hours spent on housework.”

AI Feedback

Overall Band

5.0

Modest

Words

197

Type

Multiple Graphs

Criteria Breakdown

Task Achievement

5.5 Band

The response covers both charts and gives the main long-term contrast: appliance ownership generally rose while housework time fell. It also reports several key values, including “50 hours per household in 1920” and “about 10 hours by 2019.” However, the overview does not clearly foreground the fall in housework, and “almost the households” conflicts with the chart’s 100% figures. Next, state both overall trends together and check the overview against the endpoints.

Coherence & Cohesion

5.5 Band

The answer moves from an introduction and overview into appliance details, then turns to housework with “In contrast,” which helps the reader follow the two measures. The appliance figures are mostly presented in chronological order. However, several points are packed into the opening, and the refrigerator and vacuum cleaner trends are explained separately despite their similar endpoint. Next, use a concise overview, then group related appliance comparisons before describing housework.

Lexical Resource

5.0 Band

The response uses task-relevant terms such as “ownership,” “reached,” “remained,” and “decline,” and “sharpest early rise” signals a useful comparison. Some wording is unnatural or imprecise, particularly “the shifting of households percentage” and “household spent time.” “Increased gradually” also oversimplifies the washing-machine trend, which includes a dip. Next, learn accurate collocations for describing proportions and hours, and choose trend verbs that match each line.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

4.5 Band

The answer attempts longer sentences and uses comparison and time clauses, as in “After a slight fall to about 65% in 1980, the figure climbed to 75% in 2019.” However, errors in the preserved opening—“households percentage” and “almost the households have refrigerator”—affect clarity, and tense and article use are inconsistent. Next, practise the pattern “the percentage of households that owned…” and proofread articles, plurals, and past-tense verbs.

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