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Writing Academic Task 1 Band 4.0 Example

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Task 1

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Compare the pace of adoption: refrigerator ownership rose especially quickly between 1940 and 1960, while washing-machine ownership changed more gradually.
Identify milestones in appliance ownership: refrigerators reached 100% by 1980, and vacuum cleaners did so by 2000.
Set the decline in housework hours alongside rising appliance ownership, while avoiding claims that the charts prove one trend caused the other.

Suggested structure

Introduce both charts, the measures shown and the 1920–2019 period.
Give an overview of the broad appliance-ownership increases and the fall in housework hours.
Compare the three appliances, highlighting their starting points and the years they reached universal ownership.
Describe the housework-hour decline chronologically, noting the plateau at 15 hours between 1980 and 2000.

Useful vocabulary & examples

household ownership: the proportion of households that have a particular item
Household ownership of refrigerators rose to 100% by 1980.
reach universal ownership: be owned by all households shown in the chart
Vacuum cleaners reached universal ownership in 2000.
edge down: decrease slightly
Washing-machine ownership edged down between 1960 and 1980.
remain at that level: stay unchanged at a previously stated figure
Housework time remained at 15 hours per week from 1980 to 2000.

Task Prompt

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time doing housework and households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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Band 4.0

The line graph illustrates the different electrical appliances percentage in households as well as number of hours needed in per week for work at home in a country from 1920 to 2019. Overall the electrical device like washing machine, refrigerator and vacuum cleaner used gradually increase within 99 years whereas working in house time was decreased from 50 hours per week in 1920 to about 10 hours in 2019. It fell to 35 hours in 1940 and 20 hours in 1960. After this, the figure went down more slowly, reaching 15 hours in both 1980 and 2000, before falling to about 10 hours in 2019.

In 1920, washing machines were in 40% of households, while vacuum cleaners were in about 30% and refrigerators were almost not present. In 1940, washing machines were the most popular appliance, at 60%, while the other two were both around 50%. Refrigerator ownership rose to 90% in 1960 and reached 100% in 1980. Vacuum cleaner ownership increased steadily, from 30% to 100% by 2000. Washing machine ownership rose to 70% in 1960, decreased slightly to 65% in 1980, and then increased to 75% in 2019. At the end, refrigerators and vacuum cleaners were in all households.

Targeted Improvement Tips

Replace general wording such as “used” with “were owned by” or “were present in” households to describe the appliance chart accurately.

Group the figures by chart: summarise appliance ownership together, then describe the decline in housework hours, using selected years to show the main changes.

After writing, check each sentence for articles, plural forms, and past-tense verbs; pay particular attention to the opening overview.

AI Feedback

Overall Band

4.0

Modest

Words

201

Type

Multiple Graphs

Criteria Breakdown

Task Achievement

4.5 Band

The response includes an overview and covers both charts, for example, it notes that housework time “decreased from 50 hours per week in 1920 to about 10 hours in 2019.” It also reports important appliance trends and endpoint figures. However, the opening misstates the measure as appliances being “used” rather than household ownership, and the overview could identify more clearly that refrigerators and vacuum cleaners both reached full household coverage. Next, state the main contrasts precisely before giving details.

Coherence & Cohesion

4.5 Band

The answer is organised into an overview followed by details about housework time and appliance ownership. Time markers such as “In 1920” and “At the end” help readers follow the period. However, the first body paragraph reports one chart and the next shifts to the other without a clear comparison link, while “After this” is vague. Use a clear paragraph for each chart and connect the trends with specific time references.

Lexical Resource

4.0 Band

The response uses relevant chart vocabulary, including “ownership,” “reaching,” and “decreased slightly,” and distinguishes appliances by name. Some word combinations are unnatural or imprecise, particularly “different electrical appliances percentage in households” and “working in house time.” The repeated use of “increased” also limits variety. Use standard expressions such as “the percentage of households with” and “hours spent on housework,” while keeping terms for ownership consistent.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

3.5 Band

There are some correctly formed past-tense statements, such as “It fell to 35 hours in 1940,” but frequent errors affect accuracy. The opening has missing articles and awkward word order, and the preserved phrase “the electrical device like … used gradually increase” has problems with number, verb form, and sentence structure. Review articles, plural nouns, and past-tense verbs; then check each sentence for a clear subject and verb.

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