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Writing Academic Task 1 Band 5.0 Example

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186 words AcademicTask 1Pie Chart

Task 1

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Compare the leading reason across both years: suitable degree courses ranked first, rising slightly from 35% to 37%.
Highlight the largest increase: choosing a university close to the parental home went from 10% to 22%.
Contrast the sharpest decline with the smaller fall: sports and social activities dropped from 19% to 6%, while quality of resources moved from 21% to 17%.

Suggested structure

Paraphrase the chart topic and identify both years.
Give an overview of the top reason and the most notable increases and decreases.
Describe the 1987 figures, grouping the largest and smallest categories.
Compare the 2007 figures with 1987, using exact percentages and clear change language.

Useful vocabulary & examples

accounted for: made up a particular percentage or share
Suitable degree courses accounted for 35% of responses in 1987.
rose slightly: increased by a small amount
The share choosing suitable degree courses rose slightly to 37%.
increased considerably: grew by a noticeable amount
The proportion choosing a university close to home increased considerably, from 10% to 22%.
fell substantially: decreased by a large amount
Good sports and social activities fell substantially, from 19% to 6%.

Task Prompt

The charts below show the main reasons why students chose a particular university in the UK, in 1997 and 2007.

User Essay Analysis

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Band 5.0

Overall, it is clearly observed that the matchable degree courses were the most popular chosen by academicians. In addition, the percentage of most selective factors changed relatively from the period shown. On the one hand, there was an upward trend in the proportion of sustaible degree degrees, quality of teaching, and proximity to parental home. Specifically, the figures for suitable degree courses, quality of teaching and closeness to the parental home rose from 35%, 15% and 10% in the earlier year to 37%, 18% and 22% in 2007, respectively. The increase was greatest for proximity to home, which more than doubled, while the other two categories rose only slightly. By contrast, quality of resources declined from 21% to 17%, and good sports and social activities fell sharply from 19% to 6%. In the later chart, suitable courses remained the leading reason at 37%, followed by proximity to home at 22%. Teaching quality and resources accounted for similar proportions, at 18% and 17%, whereas sports and social activities were least important. Overall, the reasons shifted toward course suitability and location, while leisure facilities became much less influential.

Targeted Improvement Tips

Check the year labels against the graphic: the prompt says 1997, but the left chart appears to be labelled 1987. Do not guess; clarify or use the date printed in the visual.

Replace the first two sentences with one clear overview naming the leading reason and the broad shift in reasons between the charts.

Group and compare the figures by direction of change: report the three increases together, then the two decreases, using accurate start and end percentages.

AI Feedback

Overall Band

5.0

Modest

Words

186

Type

Pie Chart

Criteria Breakdown

Task Achievement

5.0 Band

The continuation gives the chart’s key figures and identifies the main changes, including the rise in proximity to home from 10% to 22% and the fall in sports and social activities from 19% to 6%. However, the preserved opening calls courses “matchable” and does not clearly summarize the data. Also, the prompt says 1997 while the graphic labels the earlier chart 1987; check this discrepancy and follow the chart’s printed data.

Coherence & Cohesion

4.5 Band

The answer has a recognizable overview followed by comparisons, and “By contrast” usefully signals the declining categories. However, “On the one hand” is not balanced by a corresponding “on the other hand,” and the opening’s “percentage of most selective factors changed relatively” does not clearly introduce the overview. Organize the report around an overview, then increases, then decreases, with each paragraph grouped by trend.

Lexical Resource

4.0 Band

Some useful task vocabulary appears in phrases such as “upward trend” and “fell sharply,” and the continuation uses category names accurately. But “matchable,” “academicians,” and “sustaible degree degrees” are inaccurate or unclear choices that make the opening hard to understand. Use the chart’s wording—“suitable degree courses,” “students,” and “proportion”—and choose precise terms such as “increased” or “declined” for changes.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

4.5 Band

The continuation uses a clear comparative structure in “rose from 35%, 15% and 10% … to 37%, 18% and 22%,” and the sentences are generally complete. The preserved opening, however, includes an awkward construction in “the percentage of most selective factors changed relatively” and lacks an article in “proximity to parental home.” Check sentence structure and use natural noun phrases, for example “the proportion choosing proximity to the parental home.”

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