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Writing Academic Task 1 Band 6.0 Example

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192 words AcademicTask 1Pie Chart

Task 1

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Compare the leading reason across both years: suitable degree courses ranked first, rising slightly from 35% to 37%.
Highlight the largest increase: choosing a university close to the parental home went from 10% to 22%.
Contrast the sharpest decline with the smaller fall: sports and social activities dropped from 19% to 6%, while quality of resources moved from 21% to 17%.

Suggested structure

Paraphrase the chart topic and identify both years.
Give an overview of the top reason and the most notable increases and decreases.
Describe the 1987 figures, grouping the largest and smallest categories.
Compare the 2007 figures with 1987, using exact percentages and clear change language.

Useful vocabulary & examples

accounted for: made up a particular percentage or share
Suitable degree courses accounted for 35% of responses in 1987.
rose slightly: increased by a small amount
The share choosing suitable degree courses rose slightly to 37%.
increased considerably: grew by a noticeable amount
The proportion choosing a university close to home increased considerably, from 10% to 22%.
fell substantially: decreased by a large amount
Good sports and social activities fell substantially, from 19% to 6%.

Task Prompt

The charts below show the main reasons why students chose a particular university in the UK, in 1997 and 2007.

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Band 6.0

The provided pie charts illustrate the dominant reasons motivating student choices at a specific UK university in 1987 and 2007. Overall, it can be seen that Suitable degree courses were most factor in importance each year, whereas quality of teaching grew moderately and the figure for quality of resources decreased. Remaining factors such as good sports and social activities and closeness to home also changed notably. In 1987, suitable degree courses accounted for 35%, making this the leading reason. Quality of resources was second at 21%, followed by sports and social activities at 19%. Teaching quality represented 15%, while living close to home was least important, at 10%.

By 2007, degree courses remained the top consideration, edging up to 37%. The proportion selecting proximity to home more than doubled to 22%, moving it into second place. Meanwhile, teaching quality rose slightly from 15% to 18%, and resources fell by four percentage points to 17%. The sharpest decline was in good sports and social activities, which dropped from 19% to 6%, becoming the smallest category.

Overall, students continued to prioritize their courses, while location gained importance and sports facilities became considerably less influential.

Targeted Improvement Tips

Replace the incomplete overview phrase “were most factor in importance” with a complete comparison that clearly identifies degree courses as the largest category in both years.

Check each chart category against both figures before summarising: courses 35% to 37%, resources 21% to 17%, home proximity 10% to 22%, teaching 15% to 18%, and sports/social activities 19% to 6%.

Use precise change language: describe the move from 10% to 22% as more than doubling, and the fall from 19% to 6% as a 13-percentage-point decrease.

AI Feedback

Overall Band

6.0

Competent

Words

192

Type

Pie Chart

Criteria Breakdown

Task Achievement

7.0 Band

The overview identifies the main pattern: “Suitable degree courses were most factor in importance each year,” and it notes the contrasting movements in teaching and resources. The completed response also gives figures for all five categories and highlights the shift in home proximity and the fall in sports activities. The chart labels the first year 1987, as the answer states. For refinement, make the overview’s leading category and its changes clearer and grammatically complete.

Coherence & Cohesion

7.0 Band

The response moves from an overview to details for 1987, then compares the 2007 figures and closes with a summary. That sequence makes the information easy to follow, and contrasts such as “rose slightly” and “fell by four percentage points” help connect the comparisons. The first overview sentence is awkwardly phrased, however, and “Remaining factors” is a slightly vague transition. Use a direct overview followed by clearly grouped chart details.

Lexical Resource

6.5 Band

There is useful chart-reporting vocabulary in phrases such as “leading reason,” “more than doubled,” and “sharpest decline.” The answer also varies its descriptions of increases and decreases. Some collocations are less natural, especially “dominant reasons motivating student choices” and “grew moderately”; “were most factor” is also an inaccurate form. Prefer concise expressions such as “main reasons,” “rose slightly,” and “the most important reason.”

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

6.0 Band

The completed response uses a mix of simple and more developed sentences, including the comparison “which dropped from 19% to 6%.” Most of the detailed comparisons are grammatically clear. The preserved phrase “Suitable degree courses were most factor” contains a clear grammatical error: it needs a determiner and a natural noun phrase. There is also avoidable passive wording in “it can be seen.” Review articles and fixed collocations, then proofread the overview separately.

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