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Writing Academic Task 1 Band 5.0 Example

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207 words AcademicTask 1Line Graph

Task 1

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Identify the overall direction of each line separately: margarine and butter fall over the full period, while the low-fat variety rises after it appears and then declines.
Highlight key turning points: butter peaks in 1986, margarine reaches a plateau around 100 grams in 1991–1996, and the low-fat line surges by 2001.
Mention crossovers where they change the ranking: Low Fat & Reduced Spreads is highest in 2001, while butter and margarine are no longer the leading series.

Suggested structure

Introduce the graph, naming all three spreads, the years and the unit.
Give an overview that accurately summarises the different overall patterns and the late-period ranking.
Describe butter and margarine together, using their start values, peaks or plateaus and final values.
Describe the later-starting low-fat series and compare its 2001 peak with the other spreads.

Useful vocabulary & examples

reached a peak of: rose to its highest recorded value
Butter reached a peak of approximately 160 grams in 1986.
remained stable at: stayed at approximately the same level
Margarine consumption remained stable at around 100 grams from 1991 to 1996.
overtook both alternatives: became higher than the other two series
Low Fat & Reduced Spreads overtook both alternatives in 2001.
eased to: fell slightly or gradually to a lower value
The low-fat spread eased to about 70 grams by 2007.

Task Prompt

The graph below shows the consumption of 3 spreads from 1981 to 2007.

User Essay Analysis

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Band 5.0

The percentages of employed women in the four countries between 1985 and 2005 are demonstrated in the line graph. Overall , what stands out from the graph is that all of the countries experienced a significant growth in the number of occupied women while in Afghanistan , it declined enormously during the given period . The description above does not match the supplied visual: the graph shows the consumption of margarine, low-fat and reduced-fat spreads, and butter, measured in grams from 1981 to 2007. Butter was the most popular spread at the start, at about 140 grams, and rose to a peak of roughly 160 in 1986. It then fell sharply to 100 in 1991 and continued declining, reaching around 50 by 2007. Margarine began at approximately 90 grams. After dipping to 80 in 1986, it climbed to 100 in 1991 and remained at that level in 1996. Consumption then declined, ending at about 40 grams, the lowest final figure. Low-fat and reduced-fat spreads appeared in 1996 at only around 10 grams. Their consumption increased rapidly to about 85 in 2001, before falling to approximately 70 in 2007. Thus, butter showed the largest overall fall, while the newer spread peaked late and finished as the most consumed of the three.

Targeted Improvement Tips

Make the introduction identify the actual graph: consumption of three spreads, measured in grams, from 1981 to 2007.

Give an overview that compares the main trends: butter declines overall, margarine ends lowest, and low-fat spreads rise sharply after 1996.

Proofread punctuation spacing and check that every subject, pronoun, and trend description refers to the data shown.

AI Feedback

Overall Band

5.0

Modest

Words

207

Type

Line Graph

Criteria Breakdown

Task Achievement

5.0 Band

The continuation gives a relevant overview and selects key trends, including butter’s fall and the later rise in low-fat spreads. However, the preserved opening says the graph is about employed women and Afghanistan, which contradicts the supplied spreads chart. The explicit sentence, “The description above does not match the supplied visual,” makes that conflict clear rather than leaving it uncorrected. For a stronger response, replace the mismatched opening with a chart-accurate introduction and overview.

Coherence & Cohesion

5.5 Band

The spread figures are organised in a readable sequence: butter, margarine, then low-fat spreads, with start and end points compared. The transition “The description above does not match the supplied visual” helps readers understand why the subject changes, but the preserved opening still makes the answer feel internally inconsistent. Group the overview and details around the same three spreads, then use one paragraph for the main trends and another for comparisons across years.

Lexical Resource

5.0 Band

The continuation uses appropriate chart language, such as “rose to a peak,” “fell sharply,” and “remained at that level.” In contrast, “the number of occupied women” is an unsuitable phrase for this chart and does not describe what is measured; “consumption” and “grams” are the precise terms needed. Build on the clearer vocabulary in the later section, and use spread names and trend verbs consistently from the opening.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

5.5 Band

The continuation includes clear past-tense reporting and varied sentence structures, for example, “After dipping to 80 in 1986, it climbed to 100 in 1991.” The preserved opening has spacing errors before commas in “Overall ,” and “Afghanistan ,” and an unnecessary space before its final full stop. Before submitting, check punctuation spacing and ensure the grammatical subject and pronouns refer to the spreads rather than to countries or women.

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