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Writing Academic Task 1 Band 7.0 Example

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214 words AcademicTask 1Line Graph

Task 1

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Identify the overall direction of each line separately: margarine and butter fall over the full period, while the low-fat variety rises after it appears and then declines.
Highlight key turning points: butter peaks in 1986, margarine reaches a plateau around 100 grams in 1991–1996, and the low-fat line surges by 2001.
Mention crossovers where they change the ranking: Low Fat & Reduced Spreads is highest in 2001, while butter and margarine are no longer the leading series.

Suggested structure

Introduce the graph, naming all three spreads, the years and the unit.
Give an overview that accurately summarises the different overall patterns and the late-period ranking.
Describe butter and margarine together, using their start values, peaks or plateaus and final values.
Describe the later-starting low-fat series and compare its 2001 peak with the other spreads.

Useful vocabulary & examples

reached a peak of: rose to its highest recorded value
Butter reached a peak of approximately 160 grams in 1986.
remained stable at: stayed at approximately the same level
Margarine consumption remained stable at around 100 grams from 1991 to 1996.
overtook both alternatives: became higher than the other two series
Low Fat & Reduced Spreads overtook both alternatives in 2001.
eased to: fell slightly or gradually to a lower value
The low-fat spread eased to about 70 grams by 2007.

Task Prompt

The graph below shows the consumption of 3 spreads from 1981 to 2007.

User Essay Analysis

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Band 7.0

The line graph illustrates the amount of three kinds of spreads(margarine, low fat and reduced spreads and butter) which were consumed over 26 years from 1981 to 2007. Units are measured in grams. Overall, the consumption of margarine and butter decreased over the period given, while for low fat and reduced spreads, it rose. At the start of the period, butter was the most popular spread, at about 140 grams, compared with roughly 90 grams of margarine. Butter consumption then climbed to a peak of around 160 grams in 1986, before falling sharply to 100 grams in 1991. It continued to decline, reaching approximately 70 grams in 1996 and 40 grams by 2007.

Margarine use fluctuated less at first. It fell from about 90 grams to 80 in 1986, then rose to 100 grams in 1991 and remained at this level in 1996. After that, its consumption dropped to around 80 grams in 2001 and 40 grams at the end. The low-fat and reduced spreads category first appears in 1996, at approximately 10 grams. It rose steeply to about 85 grams in 2001, overtaking butter and matching margarine, before slipping to around 70 grams in 2007. Thus, butter had the highest initial figure, whereas the newer spread became the most consumed by 2007.

Targeted Improvement Tips

Rewrite the opening list with a space before the parenthesis and commas that clearly separate margarine, butter, and the low-fat and reduced-spreads category.

Make the overview more specific by mentioning both the 2001 peak and the subsequent fall in low-fat and reduced-spreads consumption.

Practise comparing series at shared years: describe the approximate values for all three categories in 1996, 2001, and 2007 rather than reporting each line in isolation.

AI Feedback

Overall Band

7.0

Good

Words

214

Type

Line Graph

Criteria Breakdown

Task Achievement

7.0 Band

The overview clearly identifies the main trends: “the consumption of margarine and butter decreased” while the low-fat and reduced-spreads category rose. The completed response also includes the key turning points and compares the series at the beginning and end. The figures are appropriately approximate. To make the overview more precise, explicitly note that butter starts highest and that the low-fat and reduced-spreads category peaks in 2001 before declining.

Coherence & Cohesion

7.0 Band

The answer moves from an introduction and overview into chronological details, and the shift to “Margarine use fluctuated less at first” helps distinguish the series. The final comparison gives the report a clear ending. However, the first detail paragraph covers butter while the next covers the other two categories, so the comparisons are somewhat split. Consider grouping details by period or comparing all three series at the key years.

Lexical Resource

6.5 Band

There is useful range in phrases such as “climbed to a peak,” “falling sharply,” and “rose steeply,” which accurately describe the graph. Some wording is less natural or precise: “amount of three kinds of spreads” and “the newer spread” are awkward or vague for a chart category. Use “consumption of three types of spread” in the introduction and repeat the category name rather than substituting an unclear label.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

6.0 Band

The continuation uses several effective complex forms, including “before falling sharply” and “whereas the newer spread became…”. The preserved opening, however, has a missing space in “spreads(margarine” and an awkward construction in “while for low fat and reduced spreads, it rose.” The list is also difficult to parse. Revise the opening with a properly punctuated list and use parallel subjects when contrasting the trends.

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