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Writing Academic Task 1 Band 8.0 Example

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222 words AcademicTask 1Line Graph

Task 1

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The coast grows overall despite a small dip between 1987 and 1992, then finishes with the highest visitor total.
The lakes show the largest fluctuation: a sharp rise to a 2002 peak followed by a substantial fall.
The mountains remain the least visited area at the end, but their numbers increase gradually rather than decline.

Suggested structure

Introduce the graph, its subject, locations and time period.
Give an overview of the broad trends, the lakes’ peak and the final ranking.
Describe the coast’s starting point, brief decline and subsequent rise.
Compare the mountains’ steady increase with the lakes’ rise and later fall.

Useful vocabulary & examples

rose steadily: increased gradually over a period
Visitor numbers for the mountains rose steadily from about 20,000 to 35,000.
peaked at: reached the highest point
The number of visitors to the lakes peaked at approximately 75,000 in 2002.
fell to: decreased and reached a particular level
The lakes’ figure fell to around 50,000 by 2007.
ended as the most popular destination: had the highest visitor figure at the end of the period
The coast ended as the most popular destination, at about 75,000 visitors.

Task Prompt

The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

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Band 8.0

Illustrated in the given line chart is the volume of foreign people visiting different destinations in a European country, including the coast, the mountains, and the lakes, over the period of 20 years. It is noticeable that there was an upward trend in the number of international tourists arriving at the coast and the mountains, while the number of visitors to the lakes changed more dramatically. Overall, the coast was the most popular area at the beginning and ended with the highest figure, whereas the lakes recorded the greatest fluctuation. All three areas had more visitors in 2007 than in 1987.

In 1987, about 40,000 overseas visitors went to the coast, compared with 20,000 for the mountains and 10,000 for the lakes. Coast numbers fell slightly to around 35,000 in 1992, then climbed to 50,000 in 1997 and approximately 75,000 by 2007. The mountain figure rose more gradually, reaching about 25,000 in 1992 and 30,000 in 1997. It remained at roughly 30,000 in 2002 before ending at 35,000.

The lakes attracted around 10,000 visitors in 1987, rising to approximately 25,000 in 1992 and 40,000 in 1997. Their number then surged to a peak of about 75,000 in 2002, overtaking the coast, before falling to 50,000 in 2007.

Targeted Improvement Tips

Use the exact years in the opening sentence so the reader immediately knows the chart’s time span: 1987 to 2007.

Make the overview identify both the coast’s overall rise and the lakes’ peak-and-decline pattern; keep detailed figures for the body paragraphs.

Check that each area’s key turning points are compared directly, especially the lakes overtaking the coast in 2002 and ending below it in 2007.

AI Feedback

Overall Band

8.0

Excellent

Words

222

Type

Line Graph

Criteria Breakdown

Task Achievement

7.5 Band

The response identifies the overall upward movement and the lakes’ larger fluctuations, then supports these points with figures for each area. For example, “surged to a peak of about 75,000 in 2002” captures the lakes’ defining change, and the comparison that it overtook the coast is relevant. To make the report more complete, state the coast’s slight 1992 dip in the overview or directly compare the final figures of all three areas there.

Coherence & Cohesion

7.5 Band

The answer moves from an opening description to an overview and then groups the coast and mountains before describing the lakes’ distinct pattern. The transition “The lakes attracted around 10,000 visitors in 1987” clearly signals the final data sequence. The organisation is easy to follow; a useful refinement would be to make the overview more concise and avoid repeating the general upward-trend point before presenting the same broad comparison again.

Lexical Resource

7.0 Band

There is useful range in phrases such as “recorded the greatest fluctuation,” “rose more gradually,” and “overtaking the coast,” which describe trends and comparisons precisely. However, “volume of foreign people” is an unnatural collocation for a chart showing visitor numbers. Replace it with “number of overseas visitors” or “visitor numbers.” Continue choosing familiar, precise chart language rather than using unusual phrasing simply to sound formal.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

7.0 Band

The answer uses varied structures, including the contrast in “whereas the lakes recorded the greatest fluctuation” and the participle phrase “rising to approximately 25,000.” Sentence boundaries and tense are generally controlled. The opening inversion, “Illustrated in the given line chart is…,” is grammatical but unnecessarily formal and makes the first sentence less direct. Use a straightforward subject–verb opening, then retain the varied clauses in the data description.

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