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Writing Academic Task 1 Band 7.0 Example

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219 words AcademicTask 1Line Graph
Task 1

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  • The coast grows overall despite a small dip between 1987 and 1992, then finishes with the highest visitor total.
  • The lakes show the largest fluctuation: a sharp rise to a 2002 peak followed by a substantial fall.
  • The mountains remain the least visited area at the end, but their numbers increase gradually rather than decline.

Suggested structure

  1. Introduce the graph, its subject, locations and time period.
  2. Give an overview of the broad trends, the lakes’ peak and the final ranking.
  3. Describe the coast’s starting point, brief decline and subsequent rise.
  4. Compare the mountains’ steady increase with the lakes’ rise and later fall.
Useful vocabulary & examples
rose steadily
increased gradually over a period

Visitor numbers for the mountains rose steadily from about 20,000 to 35,000.

peaked at
reached the highest point

The number of visitors to the lakes peaked at approximately 75,000 in 2002.

fell to
decreased and reached a particular level

The lakes’ figure fell to around 50,000 by 2007.

ended as the most popular destination
had the highest visitor figure at the end of the period

The coast ended as the most popular destination, at about 75,000 visitors.

Task Prompt

The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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Band 7.0

Given is a line graph illustrating the number of international visitors travelling to three different spots in Europe, namely the coast, mountains and lakes in the period of 20 years since 1987. In general, it is evident that while the figure for the coast and mountains went up, the data on the lakes decreased. Besides, the lakes' visitor total rose over the full period, despite falling sharply after 2002. The coast attracted about 40,000 visitors in 1987, compared with 20,000 for the mountains and 10,000 for the lakes. Coastal numbers dipped slightly to roughly 35,000 in 1992, then rose steadily, reaching around 50,000 in 1997 and 60,000 in 2002, before peaking at approximately 75,000 in 2007. The mountains showed the gentlest growth overall. Visitor numbers increased from 20,000 to about 25,000 in 1992 and 30,000 in 1997. They then remained level in 2002, before edging up to roughly 35,000 by the end. By contrast, the figure for the lakes climbed from 10,000 to around 15,000 in 1992 and 40,000 in 1997. It then surged to a peak of approximately 75,000 in 2002, overtaking both other areas, but fell sharply to 50,000 in 2007. Despite this fall, it remained second-highest in the final year.

Targeted Improvement Tips

1
Rewrite the overview to say that all three totals finish above their 1987 levels, while the lakes peak in 2002 and then decline.
2
Use a consistent unit such as “thousand visitors” or give figures in thousands, and compare the starting and ending values for each area.
3
Replace the opening inversion and vague phrases with direct subjects, precise time wording, and the term “visitor numbers.”

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