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Writing Academic Task 1 Band 4.0 Example

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199 words AcademicTask 1Line Graph

Task 1

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The coast grows overall despite a small dip between 1987 and 1992, then finishes with the highest visitor total.
The lakes show the largest fluctuation: a sharp rise to a 2002 peak followed by a substantial fall.
The mountains remain the least visited area at the end, but their numbers increase gradually rather than decline.

Suggested structure

Introduce the graph, its subject, locations and time period.
Give an overview of the broad trends, the lakes’ peak and the final ranking.
Describe the coast’s starting point, brief decline and subsequent rise.
Compare the mountains’ steady increase with the lakes’ rise and later fall.

Useful vocabulary & examples

rose steadily: increased gradually over a period
Visitor numbers for the mountains rose steadily from about 20,000 to 35,000.
peaked at: reached the highest point
The number of visitors to the lakes peaked at approximately 75,000 in 2002.
fell to: decreased and reached a particular level
The lakes’ figure fell to around 50,000 by 2007.
ended as the most popular destination: had the highest visitor figure at the end of the period
The coast ended as the most popular destination, at about 75,000 visitors.

Task Prompt

The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

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Band 4.0

The line graph displays the tourists in European country in verious areas. Overall, there was many changes in given 20 years for three areas but lakes areas had noticable change. To begin with, in 1987, for mountains and lakes areas had 20 and 10 thousands foriegn visitors. It increse slowley and steadily over 10 years and the coast had about 40 thousand. By 1997, the number for coast went up around 45 thousand, and mountain was 30 thousand. The lakes also rose quickly to about 40 thousand in this year. After that, it increased a lot and reached the highest point, about 75 thousand, in 2002. But in 2007 the lakes number went down to 50 thousand. The visitors at coast had some fall from 40 to 35 thousand in 1992, but after this it went up each period and finished at 75 thousand, the biggest number. The mountain visitors had rise more slow, from 20 thousand in 1987 to 35 thousand in 2007. It was around 30 thousand in 1997 and 2002. In conclusion, coast and lakes increased overall, while mountain also increased but not much. The lakes had largest change and coast ended as most popular area.

Targeted Improvement Tips

Write a precise opening that says the graph shows overseas visitor numbers, measured in thousands, in the coast, mountains and lakes from 1987 to 2007.

Plan an overview around the largest features: the coast ends highest, the lakes peak in 2002 and then decline, and the mountains rise gradually.

After drafting, check each sentence for a clear area as its subject, past-tense verbs, plural agreement and spellings of key words.

AI Feedback

Overall Band

4.0

Modest

Words

199

Type

Line Graph

Criteria Breakdown

Task Achievement

5.0 Band

The answer gives an overview—“coast and lakes increased overall”—and reports several useful figures, including the coast’s rise to 75 thousand and the lakes’ peak at about 75 thousand in 2002. However, the opening does not clearly identify what the figures measure, and comparisons are sometimes imprecise or incomplete. For example, the lakes’ rise between 1987 and 1997 is not quantified. Next, select the main turning points and compare all three areas using approximate figures.

Coherence & Cohesion

4.5 Band

The response follows a broadly chronological order and uses signposts such as “By 1997” and “After that,” so readers can track changes over time. However, the sequence moves between areas, and “it” in “it increased a lot” does not immediately identify the lakes. The conclusion also repeats the overview rather than adding a clear comparison. Group the coast and mountains together, then describe the lakes’ peak and decline, using explicit area names to avoid unclear references.

Lexical Resource

4.0 Band

Some task-relevant vocabulary is used, including “reached the highest point,” “went down,” and “finished at 75 thousand.” But spelling errors such as “verious” and “foriegn,” plus awkward phrases like “the lakes number,” make parts difficult to read. Repetition of “went up” and “increased” also limits precision. Practise accurate chart language such as “rose to,” “fell to,” and “stood at,” and check spellings before submitting.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

3.5 Band

The answer attempts simple past-tense reporting, but recurring errors affect clarity: “there was many changes” has subject–verb disagreement, while “The mountain visitors had rise more slow” uses an incorrect verb form and adjective. The opening phrase “in 1987, for mountains and lakes areas had” is also structurally incomplete. Practise forming sentences with a clear subject, such as “Visitor numbers in the mountains rose,” and check past-tense verbs and plural nouns.

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