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Writing Academic Task 1 Band 4.0 Example

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208 words AcademicTask 1Line Graph
Task 1

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  • The coast grows overall despite a small dip between 1987 and 1992, then finishes with the highest visitor total.
  • The lakes show the largest fluctuation: a sharp rise to a 2002 peak followed by a substantial fall.
  • The mountains remain the least visited area at the end, but their numbers increase gradually rather than decline.

Suggested structure

  1. Introduce the graph, its subject, locations and time period.
  2. Give an overview of the broad trends, the lakes’ peak and the final ranking.
  3. Describe the coast’s starting point, brief decline and subsequent rise.
  4. Compare the mountains’ steady increase with the lakes’ rise and later fall.
Useful vocabulary & examples
rose steadily
increased gradually over a period

Visitor numbers for the mountains rose steadily from about 20,000 to 35,000.

peaked at
reached the highest point

The number of visitors to the lakes peaked at approximately 75,000 in 2002.

fell to
decreased and reached a particular level

The lakes’ figure fell to around 50,000 by 2007.

ended as the most popular destination
had the highest visitor figure at the end of the period

The coast ended as the most popular destination, at about 75,000 visitors.

Task Prompt

The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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Band 4.0

The line graph depicts information about the proportion of tourists to three various region in a Europe throughout the period from 1987 to 2007. Looking from an overall perspective, it is readily apparent that the more number of overseas visitors prefer to see the coast in the timeframe except the year 2002. Talking about it in greater detail, in 1987 the coast was the most popular area, with about 40 thousand visitors, while the mountains had around 20 thousand and the lakes only 10 thousand. In 1992, the coast fell a little to about 35 thousand. The other two areas were both near 25 thousand at this point. After that, numbers for coast and lakes went up, while mountain visitors increase slowly. In 1997, coast was about 45 thousand and the lakes reached around 40 thousand, but mountains got 30 thousand. In 2002, the lakes become the highest at about 75 thousand, and the coast was close to 60 thousand. However, it did not stay top for long. At end of period, coast rose to 75 thousand and was highest again. Lakes dropped to 50 thousand, and mountains finished at about 35 thousand. Overall, mountain area had less visitors and changes was not large compared with other places.

Targeted Improvement Tips

1
Replace “proportion” with “number” and include the graph’s unit, thousands, in the introduction.
2
Write a two-part overview: the coast rises overall and ends highest, while the lakes peak in 2002 before declining; the mountains increase gradually.
3
Check every data sentence for past tense, plural nouns, and subject–verb agreement; for example, change “the lakes become” to “the lakes became.”

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