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Writing Academic Task 1 Band 5.0 Example

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221 words AcademicTask 1Line Graph

Task 1

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The coast grows overall despite a small dip between 1987 and 1992, then finishes with the highest visitor total.
The lakes show the largest fluctuation: a sharp rise to a 2002 peak followed by a substantial fall.
The mountains remain the least visited area at the end, but their numbers increase gradually rather than decline.

Suggested structure

Introduce the graph, its subject, locations and time period.
Give an overview of the broad trends, the lakes’ peak and the final ranking.
Describe the coast’s starting point, brief decline and subsequent rise.
Compare the mountains’ steady increase with the lakes’ rise and later fall.

Useful vocabulary & examples

rose steadily: increased gradually over a period
Visitor numbers for the mountains rose steadily from about 20,000 to 35,000.
peaked at: reached the highest point
The number of visitors to the lakes peaked at approximately 75,000 in 2002.
fell to: decreased and reached a particular level
The lakes’ figure fell to around 50,000 by 2007.
ended as the most popular destination: had the highest visitor figure at the end of the period
The coast ended as the most popular destination, at about 75,000 visitors.

Task Prompt

The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

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Band 5.0

The line graph illustrates the figure for overseas travellers to three different areas in a European country from 1987 to 2007. Overall, it is obvious that the number of tourists travelling to three areas increased over the period. In addition, coastal areas attracted the largest amount of people to visit here. In 1987, 40 thousands visitors travelled to the coast, while 20 thousands went to the mountains and 10 thousands to the lakes. The coast had the highest number at the start. In 1992, visitors to the coast fell slightly to about 35 thousands. At the same time, mountain and lake visitors were both around 25 thousands. After that, the coast number rose to about 45 thousands in 1997, and it continued to increase to 60 thousands in 2002. It reached around 75 thousands by 2007. The lakes also increased, from 10 thousands in 1987 to about 40 thousands in 1997. Their figure then rose sharply and reached a peak of approximately 75 thousands in 2002. However, it dropped to 50 thousands in 2007. The mountains changed more slowly. Their number went up from 20 thousands to 30 thousands by 1997, stayed at about this level in 2002, and finished at 35 thousands. Therefore, while the coast finished as the most popular area, the lakes had the highest figure in 2002.

Targeted Improvement Tips

Write an overview that distinguishes the coast’s highest final figure from the lakes’ temporary 2002 peak.

Compare the three areas at each key year, especially 1992, 2002 and 2007, instead of describing each line in isolation.

Check every quantity for the pattern “number + thousand,” and replace repeated “number” with precise alternatives such as “total” or “figure.”

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Overall Band

5.0

Modest

Words

221

Type

Line Graph

Criteria Breakdown

Task Achievement

5.5 Band

The response reports the main trend and gives comparisons, including the lakes’ peak of “approximately 75 thousands in 2002” and the coast’s rise to around 75 thousand by 2007. However, the overview claim that coastal areas attracted the largest number is too broad: the lakes were highest in 2002. Next, make the overview identify the lakes’ temporary peak and the coast’s leading position at the end.

Coherence & Cohesion

5.5 Band

The answer moves from an overview to figures for the starting year and then follows the timeline, using links such as “After that” and “However.” This makes the main sequence understandable. Some details are split by series rather than compared at the same dates, and the final sentence repeats information already given. Group the 1992 and 1997 figures across all three areas, then finish with a concise summary of the contrasting trends.

Lexical Resource

5.0 Band

The response uses relevant trend vocabulary, including “fell slightly,” “continued to increase,” and “reached a peak.” However, “the figure for” and repeated uses of “number” and “thousands” make the wording repetitive; “the largest amount of people to visit here” is also unnatural for describing visitor numbers. Use more precise alternatives such as “visitor total,” “rose,” and “the greatest number of visitors,” while keeping terminology consistent.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

4.5 Band

Most information is conveyed through straightforward clauses, but the preserved phrase “40 thousands visitors” contains a number-form error; the same pattern recurs in expressions such as “20 thousands.” The answer also relies heavily on simple sentence structures, with limited variety in complex clauses. Use “40 thousand visitors” after a number, and practise combining related comparisons with accurate conjunctions such as “while” and “whereas.”

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