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Writing Academic Task 1 Band 6.0 Example

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203 words AcademicTask 1Line Graph

Task 1

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The coast grows overall despite a small dip between 1987 and 1992, then finishes with the highest visitor total.
The lakes show the largest fluctuation: a sharp rise to a 2002 peak followed by a substantial fall.
The mountains remain the least visited area at the end, but their numbers increase gradually rather than decline.

Suggested structure

Introduce the graph, its subject, locations and time period.
Give an overview of the broad trends, the lakes’ peak and the final ranking.
Describe the coast’s starting point, brief decline and subsequent rise.
Compare the mountains’ steady increase with the lakes’ rise and later fall.

Useful vocabulary & examples

rose steadily: increased gradually over a period
Visitor numbers for the mountains rose steadily from about 20,000 to 35,000.
peaked at: reached the highest point
The number of visitors to the lakes peaked at approximately 75,000 in 2002.
fell to: decreased and reached a particular level
The lakes’ figure fell to around 50,000 by 2007.
ended as the most popular destination: had the highest visitor figure at the end of the period
The coast ended as the most popular destination, at about 75,000 visitors.

Task Prompt

The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

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Band 6.0

A comparison of the overseas visitors quantity in a European country with the further classification by three different areas between 1987 and 2007 is demonstrated in the line chart. Overall, general growth is noticeable and all the areas have higher metrics at the end of the period in 2007 compared to the beginning in 1987. The coast started at about 40,000 visitors, fell slightly to around 35,000 in 1992, and then rose steadily. It reached approximately 50,000 in 1997 and 60,000 in 2002, before ending at roughly 75,000, the highest final figure. Visitor numbers for the mountains increased more gradually, from 20,000 in 1987 to around 25,000 in 1992 and 30,000 in 1997. They remained close to 30,000 in 2002, then climbed to about 35,000 in 2007. The lakes had the lowest starting point, at around 10,000. Their total rose to roughly 20,000 by 1992 and 40,000 in 1997, then surged to a peak of about 75,000 in 2002. However, it fell to 50,000 in the final year. Thus, the lakes briefly became the most popular area, while the coast finished first and the mountains remained least visited.

Targeted Improvement Tips

Replace the broad overview with one sentence that highlights the coast’s steady rise, the lakes’ sharp peak and decline, and the mountains’ comparatively modest growth.

Check each plotted point against the chart and use approximate figures consistently; describe the coast’s 2002 figure as about 60,000 and the lakes’ peak as about 75,000.

Use direct chart-reporting collocations such as “the number of visitors” and “visitor figures,” and simplify the introductory sentence to avoid a long passive construction.

AI Feedback

Overall Band

6.0

Competent

Words

203

Type

Line Graph

Criteria Breakdown

Task Achievement

7.0 Band

The overview, “all the areas have higher metrics,” captures the broad upward trend, and the continuation adds relevant comparisons: the lakes peak in 2002, while the coast finishes highest. Approximate figures cover the main movements across all three areas. The overview could be more discriminating by mentioning the lakes’ sharp rise and subsequent fall rather than describing growth generally. Keep the key turning points prominent.

Coherence & Cohesion

6.5 Band

The response moves from an introduction and overview to a clear series-by-series account, and linking words such as “However” and “Thus” help signal contrast and summary. The detail is easy to follow chronologically. However, the overview is broad and the final sentence partly repeats the ranking already suggested by the figures. A sharper overview followed by grouped comparisons would make the progression more economical.

Lexical Resource

6.0 Band

The continuation uses suitable trend language, including “fell slightly,” “rose steadily,” and “surged to a peak,” with useful terms such as “highest final figure.” In contrast, the opening expressions “overseas visitors quantity” and “higher metrics” are unnatural for describing visitor numbers. Use standard collocations such as “number of overseas visitors” and “visitor figures,” then vary trend verbs only where they accurately describe the scale of change.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

6.0 Band

The answer includes accurate past-tense descriptions and varied sentence forms, for example, “Their total rose to roughly 20,000 by 1992 and 40,000 in 1997, then surged…” The main weakness is the cumbersome opening construction, “A comparison … with the further classification … is demonstrated,” which makes the relationship between the chart and its categories hard to express. Rewrite the introduction with a direct subject and verb, then check that each sentence has a clear grammatical focus.

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