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Writing Academic Task 1 Band 4.0 Example

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226 words AcademicTask 1Line Graph

Task 1

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Ideas to explore

Compare which series begins higher and which one ends higher; here, production starts slightly above consumption, but consumption finishes much higher.
Identify the different rates of change: production rises gradually, while consumption accelerates after the early plotted years.
Mention the axis-label problem: the task’s stated dates do not match the displayed years, and the last year is printed twice.

Suggested structure

Introduce the graph, measures, and units.
Give an overview of the overall direction and the main contrast between the two lines.
Describe production’s starting level, plateau, and gradual later rise.
Describe consumption’s early stability and sharper increase, then compare the final plotted values.
Briefly note that the displayed dates are inconsistent or duplicated where this affects interpretation.

Useful vocabulary & examples

rose gradually: increased slowly over time
Oil production rose gradually after remaining near 3 million barrels per day.
remained stable: stayed at approximately the same level
Production remained stable at around 3 million barrels per day for a period.
increased substantially: went up by a large amount
Consumption increased substantially and reached about 6.3 million barrels per day at the final plotted point.
the gap widened: the difference between two values became greater
The gap between oil consumption and production widened as consumption climbed.

Task Prompt

The line graph below shows the oil production and consumption in China between 1982 and 2006.

User Essay Analysis

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Band 4.0

The line chart illustrates the proportion of oil production and consumption in China among 1982 to 2006. Overall,it can be seen that oil consumption seems more dominant and preffered type in China there was a abrupt rise trend in consumption of China.However,production of oil slightly grow in throught the years. China of the expenditures remained unclear in the graph, because it does not show expenditures; it compares oil production and consumption. At first, production was about 2 million barrels per day and consumption was a little lower, at nearly 1.8. Production went up to around 3 in 1975 and stayed at this level until 1985. After that it rose only slowly, reaching about 3.5 at the last point. Consumption changed more. It was close to 2 in the first years and then increased quickly after 1985. It reached about 3.3 in 1995, which was higher than production. Then it continued to rise to 4 in 2005, 5 in 2010 and around 6.3 at the final plotted point. The labels at the end of the horizontal axis both say 2010, so the exact year for the final value is unclear. In general, production did not change a lot compared with consumption, and the gap between these lines became much bigger. Both measures are shown in millions of barrels per day.

Targeted Improvement Tips

Write a one-sentence overview that says consumption rose much faster and finished well above production; do not describe either line as a preference.

Report the units and approximate values together, for example, “Production was about 2 million barrels per day at the first point.”

Check the graph’s inconsistent date labels before assigning years to the final points; state that the last year is unclear rather than guessing.

AI Feedback

Overall Band

4.0

Modest

Words

226

Type

Line Graph

Criteria Breakdown

Task Achievement

4.5 Band

The answer includes an overview—“oil consumption seems more dominant”—and later gives relevant approximate figures for both lines, including the final plotted values. However, the opening calls the data “expenditures,” which the graph does not show, and “slightly grow” understates the production increase somewhat. The task wording and displayed year labels also conflict, a discrepancy the answer notices. Next, focus the overview on the main trend and clearly distinguish the graph’s measures.

Coherence & Cohesion

4.5 Band

The continuation moves from an opening overview to production, then consumption, and ends with a comparison, which gives the report a recognizable progression. The original opening is difficult to follow: “Overall,it can be seen” runs into a long, unclear sentence, and “China of the expenditures remained” interrupts the flow. Grouping the two series into clear paragraphs and using simple contrast markers such as “By contrast” would make the organisation easier to follow.

Lexical Resource

4.0 Band

There is useful chart vocabulary in phrases such as “millions of barrels per day,” “increased quickly,” and “the gap between these lines.” However, “preferred type” is not an appropriate description of a quantity, while “proportion” and “expenditures” misidentify what is measured. “A abrupt rise trend” also combines words unnaturally. Use precise terms such as “oil consumption,” “oil production,” “rose,” and “remained stable,” and check spelling before submission.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

3.5 Band

Some later sentences use straightforward, understandable structures, for example, “Production went up to around 3 in 1975.” The opening, however, contains several visible errors: “among 1982 to 2006,” “there was a abrupt,” and “production of oil slightly grow.” Missing spaces after full stops and the incomplete-looking phrase “China of the expenditures remained” also reduce clarity. Practise accurate past-tense clauses and review articles, prepositions, and sentence boundaries.

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