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Writing Academic Task 1 Band 6.0 Example

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171 words AcademicTask 1Line Graph

Task 1

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Ideas to explore

Compare which series begins higher and which one ends higher; here, production starts slightly above consumption, but consumption finishes much higher.
Identify the different rates of change: production rises gradually, while consumption accelerates after the early plotted years.
Mention the axis-label problem: the task’s stated dates do not match the displayed years, and the last year is printed twice.

Suggested structure

Introduce the graph, measures, and units.
Give an overview of the overall direction and the main contrast between the two lines.
Describe production’s starting level, plateau, and gradual later rise.
Describe consumption’s early stability and sharper increase, then compare the final plotted values.
Briefly note that the displayed dates are inconsistent or duplicated where this affects interpretation.

Useful vocabulary & examples

rose gradually: increased slowly over time
Oil production rose gradually after remaining near 3 million barrels per day.
remained stable: stayed at approximately the same level
Production remained stable at around 3 million barrels per day for a period.
increased substantially: went up by a large amount
Consumption increased substantially and reached about 6.3 million barrels per day at the final plotted point.
the gap widened: the difference between two values became greater
The gap between oil consumption and production widened as consumption climbed.

Task Prompt

The line graph below shows the oil production and consumption in China between 1982 and 2006.

User Essay Analysis

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Band 6.0

The line graph illustrates China’s production and consumption of oil from 1982 to 2006. In this period, the amount of oil being produced has remained relatively constant. On the other hand, the consumption of petrol has taken a sharp increase since 1990 and has overtaken the production in 1994. In 1982, China produced 2 millions of barrels per day, while consumption was slightly lower, at just under 2 million barrels per day. Production then rose to about 3 million and stayed close to that level for the rest of the period, ending at roughly 3.5 million barrels per day. By contrast, consumption increased only slightly until around 1990, after which it climbed more rapidly. It passed production in 1994 and continued rising, reaching about 4 million before the final point and then approximately 6 million at the end. Overall, oil consumption changed from being marginally below production to substantially exceeding it. The gap between the two measures therefore widened considerably in the later years, whereas production showed only modest growth.

Targeted Improvement Tips

Before drafting, compare the task’s stated dates with the graph’s x-axis; here, the visible labels appear inconsistent, so avoid adding unsupported year-by-year detail.

Write a one-sentence overview that contrasts the near-stable production line with the stronger rise in consumption, then support it with approximate start and end figures.

Proofread the opening specifically for data-reporting tense and number forms: use past simple for the completed period and “2 million,” not “2 millions.”

AI Feedback

Overall Band

6.0

Competent

Words

171

Type

Line Graph

Criteria Breakdown

Task Achievement

6.0 Band

The answer gives a clear overall contrast: production is described as “relatively constant,” while consumption “climbed more rapidly.” It also includes an initial comparison and approximate end values, so the main trends are covered. However, the supplied graph’s visible year labels do not appear to match the 1982–2006 period in the task, making precise dates such as “in 1994” difficult to verify against the image. Next, check the source dates and prioritise safely supported comparisons.

Coherence & Cohesion

6.5 Band

The sequence moves logically from an overview to the starting figures, then to each trend and a final comparison. Transitions such as “By contrast” and “Overall” help the reader follow the shift from similar starting levels to a widening gap. The early “On the other hand” is a little heavy, and the crossover is mentioned twice. For a tighter report, group production and consumption changes into two clear comparison paragraphs and avoid repeating the crossover.

Lexical Resource

6.0 Band

There is useful trend vocabulary in “remained relatively constant,” “climbed more rapidly,” and “widened considerably,” which makes the comparison understandable. However, “consumption of petrol” does not match the graph’s oil measure, and “has taken a sharp increase” is an unnatural collocation. Replace these with “oil consumption” and “rose sharply.” You could also vary repeated uses of “production” and “consumption” with precise references such as “the two figures.”

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

5.5 Band

The answer uses several well-formed longer clauses, for example, “after which it climbed more rapidly,” and the later sentences are generally easy to follow. There are, however, noticeable form and tense issues in the preserved opening: “2 millions” should be “2 million,” and “has remained” does not sit naturally with a finished period ending in 2006. Next, use past simple consistently for completed historical data and check plural forms after numbers.

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