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Writing Academic Task 1 Band 4.0 Example

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224 words AcademicTask 1Line Graph
Task 1

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Ideas to explore

  • Highlight the main crossover: Japan leads in the earlier years, while China overtakes it between 2005 and 2010.
  • Contrast China’s steep late increase with Japan’s gradual decline.
  • Note that the smaller series do not follow one pattern: the US fluctuates, whereas India rises to a peak and then falls.

Suggested structure

  1. Paraphrase what the graph measures and give the years covered.
  2. Summarise the overall ranking change and the main trends without listing every figure.
  3. Compare Japan and the US, using starting points, changes and final values.
  4. Describe China and India together, emphasising China’s sharp late rise and India’s smaller peak and decline.
Useful vocabulary & examples
accounted for
formed a particular percentage or share of the total

Japan accounted for about 26% of Australian exports in 1990.

rose sharply
increased quickly and substantially

China’s share rose sharply after 2005.

fluctuated
went up and down rather than changing steadily in one direction

The percentage for the US fluctuated over the period.

peaked at
reached its highest point at a particular value

India’s share peaked at about 7% in 2010.

Task Prompt

The line graph shows the percentages of Australian export with four countries. The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to 4 countries from 1990 to 2012
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User Essay Analysis

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Band 4.0

The information about Australian export with four different countries namely :- Japan, Us, China, and india for the period between 1990 and 2012 is depicted in the provided line graph. Looking from an overall perspective, it is readily apparent that japan country export had higest in the year 1990 while india had lowest then that year, at about 1%. Japan went down from 26% in 1990 to 20% in 1995, and then fell to 18% in 2000. It stayed at this level in 2005 and later decreased slightly to 17% in 2010, where it remained in 2012. The US figure changed up and down during the period. It began at 11% and went down to 8% in 1995. In 2000 it rose to 11%, but after this it dropped again, reaching 5% in 2010 before go up to 7% at the end. China started with only 2% and increased slowly to 5% in 2000. After that it climbed to 11% in 2005 and rose very quickly to 25% in 2010, and then 28% in 2012. India was about 1% in 1990 and 1995. It went up to 2% in 2000 and 5% in 2005, then reached 7% in 2010. At the last year, it fell to 5%. In general, China became the biggest export destination, while Japan was still high but had a downward trend.

Targeted Improvement Tips

1
Rewrite the overview as one clear contrast: Japan starts highest and declines, while China rises to become highest by 2012.
2
Before drafting, note the start and end values for each line and identify any major turning points, such as China’s sharp rise after 2005.
3
Proofread country names, spelling and verb forms; specifically check “Japan,” “India,” “highest” and “before going.”

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