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Writing Academic Task 1 Band 7.0 Example

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180 words AcademicTask 1Line Graph

Task 1

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Ideas to explore

Highlight the main crossover: Japan leads in the earlier years, while China overtakes it between 2005 and 2010.
Contrast China’s steep late increase with Japan’s gradual decline.
Note that the smaller series do not follow one pattern: the US fluctuates, whereas India rises to a peak and then falls.

Suggested structure

Paraphrase what the graph measures and give the years covered.
Summarise the overall ranking change and the main trends without listing every figure.
Compare Japan and the US, using starting points, changes and final values.
Describe China and India together, emphasising China’s sharp late rise and India’s smaller peak and decline.

Useful vocabulary & examples

accounted for: formed a particular percentage or share of the total
Japan accounted for about 26% of Australian exports in 1990.
rose sharply: increased quickly and substantially
China’s share rose sharply after 2005.
fluctuated: went up and down rather than changing steadily in one direction
The percentage for the US fluctuated over the period.
peaked at: reached its highest point at a particular value
India’s share peaked at about 7% in 2010.

Task Prompt

The line graph shows the percentages of Australian export with four countries. The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to 4 countries from 1990 to 2012

User Essay Analysis

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Band 7.0

The graph illustrates Australia’s export rates to four different destination countries – Japan, the US, China, and India – from 1990 to 2012. In 1990, Australia exported the most to Japan (26%). However, export to Japan saw a significant decline until the early 2000s. From 2000 to 2012, the numbers continued to slowly decline, staying at approximately 17% in 2010 and 2012.

Overall, China’s share rose dramatically to become the largest, while Japan’s fell. The US figure fluctuated, and India’s remained comparatively low throughout.

China accounted for only 2% of exports in 1990, increasing gradually to 5% in 2000 and 11% in 2005. It then climbed sharply, reaching 25% in 2010 and 28% in 2012. By contrast, the US started at 11%, fell to 8% in 1995, and returned to 11% in 2000. Its share then declined to 5% in 2010 before recovering to 7% at the end of the period. India had the smallest shares in the first years, at around 1%, but rose to 5% in 2005 and peaked at 7% in 2010. It subsequently fell to 5% in 2012.

Targeted Improvement Tips

Move the overall summary directly after the introductory sentence, highlighting China’s rise and Japan’s decline before giving country-by-country details.

Use “share” or “percentage” consistently for the vertical-axis values, and identify the country or figure rather than referring vaguely to “the numbers.”

Check that each comparison matches the plotted years: for example, note the US recovery from 5% in 2010 to 7% in 2012 and India’s fall from 7% to 5%.

AI Feedback

Overall Band

7.0

Good

Words

180

Type

Line Graph

Criteria Breakdown

Task Achievement

7.0 Band

The response covers all four destinations and identifies the main contrast: “China’s share rose dramatically to become the largest, while Japan’s fell.” It also reports the key endpoint figures, including China’s 28% and Japan’s 17%. One limitation is that the opening focuses on Japan before giving an overall summary. Next time, present the overall picture immediately after the introduction, then use the detail paragraphs to support it.

Coherence & Cohesion

7.0 Band

The answer moves from an introduction and Japan’s trend to an overview, then compares the other three countries. This gives the reader a clear route through the information, and “By contrast” helps signal a comparison. However, the overview comes after several Japan-specific sentences, so the main message is delayed. Consider placing “Overall” directly after the introductory sentence and grouping the remaining trends into clear comparison paragraphs.

Lexical Resource

6.5 Band

There is useful task vocabulary in phrases such as “declined,” “fluctuated,” “climbed sharply” and “peaked at 7%.” These choices distinguish different patterns rather than repeating one verb. Some wording is less precise, particularly “Australia’s export rates,” which can sound like rates of exporting rather than shares of exports. For greater accuracy, use “the percentages of Australian exports sent to” the four destinations.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

6.5 Band

The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentences, including “It then climbed sharply, reaching 25% in 2010 and 28% in 2012.” Most sentences are easy to understand. In the preserved phrase “the numbers continued to slowly decline,” the subject is vague, and the wording is awkward for a single country’s percentage. Replace “the numbers” with “the figure” and describe the small change more directly; proofread for precise references as well as sentence accuracy.

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