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Writing Academic Task 1 Band 9.0 Example

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213 words AcademicTask 1Line Graph
Task 1

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Ideas to explore

  • Highlight the main crossover: Japan leads in the earlier years, while China overtakes it between 2005 and 2010.
  • Contrast China’s steep late increase with Japan’s gradual decline.
  • Note that the smaller series do not follow one pattern: the US fluctuates, whereas India rises to a peak and then falls.

Suggested structure

  1. Paraphrase what the graph measures and give the years covered.
  2. Summarise the overall ranking change and the main trends without listing every figure.
  3. Compare Japan and the US, using starting points, changes and final values.
  4. Describe China and India together, emphasising China’s sharp late rise and India’s smaller peak and decline.
Useful vocabulary & examples
accounted for
formed a particular percentage or share of the total

Japan accounted for about 26% of Australian exports in 1990.

rose sharply
increased quickly and substantially

China’s share rose sharply after 2005.

fluctuated
went up and down rather than changing steadily in one direction

The percentage for the US fluctuated over the period.

peaked at
reached its highest point at a particular value

India’s share peaked at about 7% in 2010.

Task Prompt

The line graph shows the percentages of Australian export with four countries. The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to 4 countries from 1990 to 2012
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User Essay Analysis

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Band 9.0

The provided line graph displays the distribution percentages of Australian exports to four specific countries over a span of 22 years from 1990 to 2012. Overall, China emerged as the dominant recipient of Australian exports throughout the period, consistently surpassing the other three countries. Japan and the US initially held significant shares in 1990, which then generally declined, although their trends differed. In contrast, China and India began at much lower levels, but both rose over time, especially China after 2005. The later figures qualify this overview: Japan was highest at the beginning, and China only overtook it between 2005 and 2010. Japan accounted for about 26% in 1990, fell to 20% in 1995, and then decreased to around 18% in 2000 and 2005. It slipped to approximately 17% in 2010 and stayed at that level in 2012. The US share fluctuated, falling from about 11% to 8% by 1995, recovering to 11% in 2000, and then declining to 5% in 2010 before rising to 7% in 2012. By contrast, China climbed from roughly 2% in 1990 to 11% in 2005, then surged to 25% in 2010 and 28% in 2012. India remained close to 1% until 2000, rose to 5% in 2005 and peaked at 7% in 2010, before ending at 5%.

Targeted Improvement Tips

1
Rewrite the overview to state that Japan leads initially while China rises to become the largest destination later; do not say China leads throughout.
2
Group the two declining or fluctuating series (Japan and the US) together, then compare the growth of China and India.
3
Check each turning point against the graph, especially the US rebound after 2010 and India’s fall from its 2010 peak.

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