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Writing Academic Task 1 Band 5.0 Example

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194 words AcademicTask 1Line Graph

Task 1

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Ideas to explore

Highlight the main crossover: Japan leads in the earlier years, while China overtakes it between 2005 and 2010.
Contrast China’s steep late increase with Japan’s gradual decline.
Note that the smaller series do not follow one pattern: the US fluctuates, whereas India rises to a peak and then falls.

Suggested structure

Paraphrase what the graph measures and give the years covered.
Summarise the overall ranking change and the main trends without listing every figure.
Compare Japan and the US, using starting points, changes and final values.
Describe China and India together, emphasising China’s sharp late rise and India’s smaller peak and decline.

Useful vocabulary & examples

accounted for: formed a particular percentage or share of the total
Japan accounted for about 26% of Australian exports in 1990.
rose sharply: increased quickly and substantially
China’s share rose sharply after 2005.
fluctuated: went up and down rather than changing steadily in one direction
The percentage for the US fluctuated over the period.
peaked at: reached its highest point at a particular value
India’s share peaked at about 7% in 2010.

Task Prompt

The line graph shows the percentages of Australian export with four countries. The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to 4 countries from 1990 to 2012

User Essay Analysis

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Band 5.0

The line graph below illustrates about australian exports to Japan,US,China and India from the years 1990 to 2012. Overall, exports to Japan ,US and India showed an decrease whereas, exports to china showed an increase. In the beginning of the year, the exports to india from australia showed a slight increase and reached to 15 per cent. This stated figure is not supported by the graph: India is at about 1% in 1990 and 1995, then climbs to 5% in 2005 and 7% in 2010, before ending at 5% in 2012. Likewise, although the overview groups India with the declining destinations, its final figure is higher than its starting point. Japan began as the largest market, at about 26%, but fell steadily to 17% by 2010 and remained there in 2012. US exports fluctuated, dropping from roughly 11% to 8% in 1995, recovering to 11% in 2000, and then falling to 5% in 2010 before a modest rise to 7%. China rose from about 2% to 11% by 2005, then surged to 25% in 2010 and approximately 28% at the end. By 2010, China had overtaken Japan and became the leading destination.

Targeted Improvement Tips

Check the first and final values for each line before writing the overview; India rises overall from about 1% to 5%, despite falling after its 2010 peak.

Group the body comparisons: describe Japan and the US together as declining overall, then contrast them with China's strong growth and India's rise followed by a dip.

Proofread the opening for capitalization, articles and chart phrasing; write “Australian exports,” “a decrease,” and “reached 15,” while verifying every number against the graph.

AI Feedback

Overall Band

5.0

Modest

Words

194

Type

Line Graph

Criteria Breakdown

Task Achievement

4.5 Band

The response includes an overview and useful comparisons, such as China rising to about 28% and Japan ending at 17%. However, the opening says India declined and “reached to 15 per cent,” both of which conflict with the graph. You do acknowledge the unsupported figure and later describe India's actual pattern, but the report remains internally contradictory. Before drafting, check each start and end value, then make the overview match those comparisons.

Coherence & Cohesion

5.0 Band

The answer moves from an overview to details about India, Japan, the US and China, and phrases such as “Likewise” and “By 2010” help connect comparisons. Its main weakness is that the later correction about India contradicts the opening rather than replacing it, which disrupts the report's logic. Organise the response into a clear overview followed by grouped comparisons, and remove claims that the data later disproves.

Lexical Resource

5.0 Band

There is some useful chart language, including “fluctuated,” “surged” and “overtaken,” which describes changes and relative position clearly. The opening phrase “illustrates about” is not a natural way to introduce the subject, and inconsistent capitalization of “australian,” “china” and “india” weakens presentation. Use standard terms such as “shows the proportion of Australian exports,” and choose precise verbs that reflect the size and direction of each change.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

4.5 Band

The later sentences use several effective structures, including “although the overview groups India...” and a sequence of participles describing US exports. The preserved opening has repeated accuracy problems: “an decrease,” “reached to 15,” and missing spaces after commas in “Japan,US,China.” These are clear editing targets, not problems throughout the entire response. Check articles, verb patterns and punctuation, then proofread the opening separately.

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