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Writing Academic Task 2 Band 4.0 Example

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315 words AcademicTask 2

Task 2

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Ideas to explore

Publicly funded professional training may create a reasonable expectation that graduates contribute to local services, especially where skilled workers are scarce.
Freedom to work abroad can support career development and may bring expertise back through return migration or international collaboration.
A choice between a defined period of service and proportionate repayment can balance public investment with individual mobility.

Suggested structure

Introduce the disagreement and state a qualified position.
Explain the argument for requiring local service, linking public funding to shortages and taxpayer benefit.
Present the case for freedom of movement, including professional opportunity and possible benefits to the home country.
Give your own balanced solution and explain why it is fair.
Conclude by restating the principle that retention is better supported by good opportunities than by excessive restrictions.

Useful vocabulary & examples

public investment: Government or taxpayer spending intended to benefit the public.
A period of local service could help ensure that public investment in medical training benefits the community.
skilled-worker shortages: A lack of qualified people available to fill important jobs.
Skilled-worker shortages may worsen if many newly trained professionals leave immediately.
a proportionate share: A fair amount that reflects the size or level of something.
Graduates could repay a proportionate share of heavily subsidised training costs.
freedom of movement: The ability to choose where to live or work without unreasonable restrictions.
A balanced policy should recognise professionals’ freedom of movement.

Task Prompt

Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe that they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Band 4.0

In the recent years, it has been observed that many people were made choices to get professional degree. In this regard, some individuals believe that doctors and engineers are supposed to practice in their homeland while some think that they are free to make their choices as they want. I shed light on both views. On the one hand, doctors and engineers get training from their country, and they can help the people who live there. For example, a doctor can work in a hospital and give care to local people. If these professionals leave after their study, their country may have less workers. Also, the government or other people may spend money for their education, so it is fair that they give some service back. This is a important reason for them to stay, at least for a few years. On the other hand, every person should have freedom to choose where to work. Some people want to go to another country because there are more jobs or better salary. They can also learn new skills and meet different people. If they are forced to stay in one place, they may not be happy and they may not do their best work. Countries can also benefit when skilled workers move, because they can share their knowledge with other people. In my opinion, professionals should be free to work in another country, but they should think about the people who helped them to get trained. If they have received support from their government, they can work there for some time or help in another way. However, it is not right to make everyone stay in their training country for all their career. In conclusion, staying can help the home country, while moving can give professionals more opportunities. I believe that they should have a choice, and support for training can be repaid in fair ways.

Targeted Improvement Tips

Develop the training-cost point by explaining who provided the support and what a reasonable period of service might achieve, without suggesting that all professionals have the same circumstances.

Replace broad phrases such as “better salary” and “more jobs” with a short explanation of how overseas work could improve a professional’s skills or career.

Proofread specifically for articles and plurals: check phrases such as “a important reason,” “professional degree,” and “less workers,” and read each corrected sentence aloud.

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Overall Band

4.0

Modest

Words

315

Type

Task 2

Criteria Breakdown

Task Response

5.0 Band

The response addresses both positions and gives a clear preference in “professionals should be free to work in another country.” It also offers relevant reasons about local services, training costs, and career opportunities. However, the ideas are mostly general: the claim that a country may have “less workers” is not developed, and the suggested repayment of support remains vague. Next, explain one consequence for each view with a specific, logically connected example.

Coherence & Cohesion

5.0 Band

The answer has a recognisable progression from “On the one hand” to “On the other hand” and then “In my opinion,” followed by a conclusion. This makes the discussion easy to follow. Some points are listed rather than developed, and “Also” and “For example” carry much of the linking. Next, give each body paragraph one central claim, then connect its explanation and example directly to that claim.

Lexical Resource

4.0 Band

Topic vocabulary such as “training,” “local people,” “skilled workers,” and “opportunities” is relevant and generally understandable. However, several phrases are unnatural or repetitive, including “make their choices as they want” and “give some service back.” The range is also limited, with repeated use of “country” and “work.” Next, learn collocations such as “serve the community that trained them” and use them accurately in varied sentences.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

4.0 Band

The response uses some basic complex structures, including “If they are forced to stay in one place, they may not be happy,” and the meaning is usually clear. Frequent errors remain, such as “were made choices,” “professional degree,” and “This is a important reason.” There are also agreement and article problems. Next, check each sentence for subject–verb agreement, articles, and plural nouns, then practise combining accurate simple sentences.

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