Part 2 · Band 7

Describe a person who encouraged you to achieve a goal.

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I would like to talk about a situation that demanded a lot of perseverance from my side, and my brother was always there to push me forward and always remind me of my resilience to overcome the situation. Actually, I was suffering from a chronic digestive disease called hyperacidity, in which the food comes back up and caused discomfort. My brother encouraged me to focus on a manageable daily routine while I followed the advice I had received from a qualified professional. The goal I want to describe was to regain confidence in ordinary activities rather than let worry dominate every day. My brother did not pretend that encouragement was a treatment. Instead, he helped me plan small practical tasks and reminded me that I could ask for support when I needed it. For example, we would choose one achievable activity, such as completing a short piece of study or spending time outside. He checked in with me and listened when I felt frustrated. He also encouraged me to keep track of small improvements rather than compare every day with an ideal version of how I thought I should feel. That patient approach made the goal less overwhelming. I cannot say that his support solved the underlying health issue, but it helped me feel less alone and more willing to continue with the plan I had been given. What I value most is that he combined encouragement with respect for my limits. He supported progress without making promises about recovery.

Answer analysis

Fluency & Coherence

The goal, the person’s actual encouragement and its effect should be explicit. The wording “a situation that demanded a lot of perseverance from my side” is the opening practice focus. Use a short introduction and develop the actual event without memorised preambles. This is a text-based planning guide; no recorded fluency score can be inferred from the transcript.

Lexical Resource

The phrase “a situation that demanded a lot of perseverance from my side” is a useful point for improving precision. Use a natural expression instead of “from my side”. The alternative “a difficult period that required perseverance” stays connected to this particular cue card. Prefer concrete actions and observations to dramatic adjectives or broad claims about everyone’s experience.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

The revision of “always remind me of my resilience” is “always reminded me that I could keep making progress”. Maintain the past tense and make the support concrete. Keep the tense of the event distinct from the present explanation of why it matters. Use shorter controlled clauses where the source loses a clear subject or connection; do not treat every optional style change as a grammatical error.

Pronunciation

No audio is available, so pronunciation cannot be scored. Practise “a difficult period that required perseverance” and “always reminded me that I could keep making progress” as thought groups, marking the words that carry the main contrast. Record the whole answer and check whether the listener can follow the sequence without reading the transcript.

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  • The goal, the person’s actual encouragement and its effect should be explicit. Use the actual event to organise the response.
  • Practise the quoted revisions in complete sentences and retain personal details already given.
  • Record one continuous answer, then check pauses and emphasis against the sequence of ideas.

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Ideas to explore

  • Name one specific goal and explain why it mattered to you.
  • Describe two concrete ways the person supported you, such as setting small targets and giving feedback.
  • Explain what changed after the encouragement and what you learned from the experience.

Suggested structure

  1. Briefly introduce the person and your relationship.
  2. State the goal and why you found it challenging.
  3. Give specific examples of how the person encouraged you.
  4. Describe the result and reflect on why the support mattered.
Useful vocabulary & examples
set manageable targets
choose small, realistic steps towards a larger goal

My mother helped me set manageable targets for practising my speaking.

offer gentle feedback
give suggestions in a supportive, non-critical way

After each practice, she offered gentle feedback on one thing I could improve.

grow in confidence
become more self-assured over time

I began to grow in confidence as I spoke more often in class.

break a goal into steps
divide a larger aim into smaller actions

It became easier to make progress once I broke my goal into steps.

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