Part 2 · Band 6

Describe a person who encouraged you to achieve a goal.

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Well, I believe motivation plays an integral role in our lives. Without motivation or inspiration, it's very difficult to achieve goals in life. Today, I would like to talk about my mom who has always supported me in whatever I have done. Her guidance has helped me in many ways. My mother's name is Nielofa, and she is the person I think of when I remember how I worked toward a goal. One goal I had was to become more confident speaking English in front of other people. I knew some vocabulary and grammar, but I worried about making mistakes, so I sometimes avoided speaking up. Nielofa encouraged me not to give up. She listened while I practised short talks and reminded me that mistakes were part of learning. She also suggested that I set a small target: practise speaking for a few minutes each day and share my ideas whenever I had the chance. When I felt nervous, she praised my effort and helped me notice what I had improved. Gradually, I became more comfortable expressing myself. I still make mistakes, but I no longer see them as a reason to stay silent. I achieved my goal through regular practice and her steady support. What makes her encouragement special is that it was both kind and practical. She believed in me and helped me take manageable steps. I’m grateful to her because she taught me that confidence grows when you keep trying.

Answer analysis

Fluency & Coherence

The ideas develop in a clear sequence: you introduce Nielofa, explain the goal of speaking English more confidently, describe her practical encouragement, and reflect on the result. The shift from the general opening about motivation to your personal example is understandable, though the opening could reach the story sooner. Practise this answer in a two-minute recording: allow about 20 seconds for the introduction, 70 seconds for the goal and her support, and 30 seconds for the outcome and reflection. This is a text-based comment, not an assessment of recorded delivery.

Lexical Resource

The answer uses relevant vocabulary for encouragement and progress, including “steady support,” “set a small target,” and “manageable steps.” These phrases make Nielofa’s help sound practical rather than merely general. The opening repeats broad terms such as “motivation,” “inspiration,” and “goals,” so the personal story takes a little time to emerge. To refine it, reduce one general sentence and use a more specific phrase from the story, such as “practise speaking” or “expressing myself.”

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

There is a useful mix of simple and complex structures, such as “When I felt nervous, she praised my effort” and “I still make mistakes, but I no longer see them as a reason to stay silent.” These clauses are clear and support the timeline. The opening also relies on several straightforward statements, so there is room for more variety without making the answer harder to follow. Try combining one related pair of sentences while keeping the main story easy to say aloud.

Pronunciation

No pronunciation score can be estimated from text alone; this practice guide is not an assessment of a recording. Practise word stress in “motivation” and “encouraged,” and give the key words in “steady support” clear emphasis. Divide the answer into thought groups at sentence boundaries, especially around the goal, Nielofa’s advice, and the result. Record yourself reading it once, mark any words that sound unclear on playback, then record it again with those words stressed deliberately.

A transcript shows language and organisation. Fluency, delivery and pronunciation require an audio recording; the synthetic voice demonstrates the text, not the original speaker.

  • Shorten the general introduction so you reach Nielofa and your goal within the first 20 seconds.
  • Make the story easy to follow by practising the sequence: goal, difficulty, her advice, and outcome.
  • Record a two-minute response, then check whether you give a concrete example of what Nielofa did and finish with what you learned.

Plan your answer

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Ideas to explore

  • Name one specific goal and explain why it mattered to you.
  • Describe two concrete ways the person supported you, such as setting small targets and giving feedback.
  • Explain what changed after the encouragement and what you learned from the experience.

Suggested structure

  1. Briefly introduce the person and your relationship.
  2. State the goal and why you found it challenging.
  3. Give specific examples of how the person encouraged you.
  4. Describe the result and reflect on why the support mattered.
Useful vocabulary & examples
set manageable targets
choose small, realistic steps towards a larger goal

My mother helped me set manageable targets for practising my speaking.

offer gentle feedback
give suggestions in a supportive, non-critical way

After each practice, she offered gentle feedback on one thing I could improve.

grow in confidence
become more self-assured over time

I began to grow in confidence as I spoke more often in class.

break a goal into steps
divide a larger aim into smaller actions

It became easier to make progress once I broke my goal into steps.

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